Narcissus

Narcissus are in full blooman old scent is mingling with my memoriesspreading all over in my mindi remember the nightthat he made me look at the skymemorizing the moon and each single star... his hands on my wastehis eyes watching my every move his lips pouring temptation into my earshis body all fire ....an invitation to danceand the night was only playing love..... oh the scentthe sweet scent of narcissusmaking me dizzy stillafter all these years...

aka darya

About This Poem

About the Author

Comments

Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

Sweet memory Darya

This is a sweet memory, you have the gift of catching our imagination and transforming it into the now, as if something past is here still. I too know the perfume of the Narcissus, a heady sweetness that permeates your poem. A good poem for me. There was just one line that I stumbled a little on ..."spreading all over in my mind" I wonder if it could be said in a slightly different way? I had thoughts but then yours was better at expressing what you wish to...so I don't know. Yours Ann of Norway

Darya

17 years ago

Hi Ann,Thanks for your

Hi Ann, Thanks for your comments and the time you took to read my poem...sorry for late reply .....Recently I have been living outside of the world of poetry ..... …”spreading all over in my mind” what do you think I should replace this with? Thanks Darya

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 7 months ago