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faerybeki

Mar 09, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Way to the Blue.

I'll remember you.
As a good dream I was woken from too soon.
As a laugh in the bath
and a way to the blue.

— faerybeki, Mar 09, 2009

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17 years 2 months ago

Having given it some thought

Having given it some thought have decided to go with alternative title!! And having given it some more thought have reverted to original title!

S

sha_onarainyday

17 years 2 months ago

I believe this is a good

I believe this is a good thought, but a beginning, not a whole. Finish it. you know there's more to that story. I only want to understand -sha

17 years 2 months ago

Actaually Sha there is a

Actaually Sha there is a line missing here that was in the original draft of this poem, i was trying so hard to fit it into a Haiku like format and therefore shortened it! Will put it back in, see what you think? There is so much more to this story (see 'echoes and stains' if you really want to more fully understand) but i wanted to see if i could take a 'snapshot' with my words, find just a few lines that, for me, encapsulated the relationship! Thanks Sha for your read and, as always, thought provoking comment!! much love b x