Frozen In Time

seems to ring out and not knowing which way to turn creeps up from the words, Standing there waiting for what may never be, quite a write of motionless dreams. Time to move on and greet the new day, hopfully your next poem, just a "D" to put on the end of a Promise there Barbara. I liked the frozen in time write, Yours, Ian.T

This is really quite beautiful, though wistful, a bit sad. 'magining the promise land while Waiting in the dusty skies of dreams I love this line and I can relate to it. Just remember, there is a spring thaw for frozen time too. Yours, Deelilah P.S. That is an adorable little boy.

sad and haunting. One line bothers me a little Looking through problem stain glass perhaps Looking through problem stained glass or Looking through problem-stain glass also, as yenti mentioned, Imagining the promise land while Imagining the promised land while allthough it works both ways the meaning is slightly different. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.

...but, must agree about using the past tense on the two words,"stain", and "promise". Other than that, quite the enjoyable, haunting write. Always my best to you, #{:>{)]@==== docmaverick.

I had to read this, the title was so catchy! And it is a really great write, even though I second the move to use the past tense with "stain" and "promise". Also, I think you could leave out the comma in line 5 and would like to know about "quiet" in line 9 if there may be a little typo ("quite"?). I particularly loved the second stanza, the image of the problem stained glass that obscures the longed-for words. Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)