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The Day's Final Salute to Itself

Small, pedestrian-like "tornados" swirl through the dust,
clouding the paths of their existence just enough,
so that I cannot view their landing patterns.

The dirt-laden air is difficult to tolerate
while I'm trying to breathe in deep, the majesty of the sunset.
But, the hues of dusk convince me easily that it's upon me.

The desert wind can speak volumes into my ear, sharing with me it's insight,
and causing all of the "wind-down sounds" to travel through me,
for I'm then able to discern many a sound at this, the day's end.

I hear the sound of crunching gravel
as a vehicle attempts to weigh itself, or so it seems...
..adding the subtlest of soundtracks to the sunset's dying shades of orange.

The "Sentry Order of the Tumbleweed", along with it's supervisor...the "wind"
patrols the streets, alleys, and by-ways,
pausing to take a peek under cars, in order to assure that all is "well".

It is.....and as the night begins to swallow the day's final salute to itself,
and all that the day's activities has provided, and such...
a shiver suddenly begins to silently surround my spine.....and so, I retreat.....to where it's warm.
..
— docmaverick, Mar 07, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 3 months ago

Love this, Doc,

an eery portrait, highly evocative and great use of language. I think you could drop the inverted commas, up to you. Also consider losing either small or minute in the first line, redundant, unless minute means a measure of time, then perhaps- brief, ephemeral, evanescent, fleeting, momentary, passing, short-lived, transient. cheers, Jess I am forever unwrapping the eternal present.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 3 months ago

The Day's Final Salute

You brought me there with your words Doc. ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
AW

Antoinette Mar…

17 years 3 months ago

The day's final salute to itself

You Do have a way of taking us with you with your writings...as always I love the usage of words expressed by "Doc" Thank you
AW

Antoinette Mar…

17 years 3 months ago

The Day's final Salute

You DO have a way of transporting us to into your writings ...a lovely adventure as always I Loved it! Thank You!!
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 3 months ago

...final salute....

...has been "fixed". Thank-you for all of your "reads and comments"; and elf...I changed "minute" to a word you had NOT thought of; you like? thanks, again... #{:>{)]@=== docmaverick.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 3 months ago

I like

it reminds me of what we call "willy-willys", tiny dust tornadoes. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.