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Total Impression

Total Impression

 

 

Bleed your words upon my eyes

The ink that runs through your veins

Staining my retinas

Tattooing images across my vision

 

Into my ears place those murmurs

Of pain, that I may hear the

Wounds that whisper ever near

Your surface, in eternal eddies

 

Upon my skin, blend your

Palette of colors till one

Shade merges with the next

 

Then,

I am complete

Submerged

An opaque reflection

Of your essence

 

 

 

— Tonya, Mar 06, 2009

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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 3 months ago

so do I great write

I like the line the ink that run through my veins when i need to vent the ink in my veins flow for hours of days sometimes. like how you made the images jump from the page ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you Barbara. I am

Thank you Barbara. I am glad you liked the poem. I think we all think ink is in our veins. lol, idon't know that line alone is one that has not been thought of before, but the thought came together and i wanted to use it in the context i presented it in. Thank you for reading sweet lady! always Sincere, Tonya
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Tonya...

Now that is feeling the words... washing over in the reaches and the unreachables... loved this! Richard
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

Ya know Richard, theres

Ya know Richard, theres nothing like reading the soul of someone... just absorbing what they say and relating to that feeling. I think, it allows us to become one with them for a moment. Feeling, experiancing what they maybe thinking. Words, omnipotent beings that come to life! lol Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed. always Sincere, Tonya
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 3 months ago

Beautifully written, love

Beautifully written, love the image of ink through the veins. It is a powerful one. It's amazing how lost you seem in the moment of writing this...just you, the poem and all the world around you...stunning. Peace and Love Katie
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loveyu74848

17 years 3 months ago

ahh aunt tawn so

ahh aunt tawn so beautiful... wanting to take in the words and truly get the feeling trying to be portrayed is what i got out of it... oh my it is late i am going back to bed i had some more things to say but i got distracted with vh1 and they flittered away... oh i was wrong about the phone we are on the same network so no worries... call me anytime u like... lots of love christy
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

SWEET! i was worried after

SWEET! i was worried after I had called. Wowza, you was up late princess. lol. Thank you, and yes.. being totally absorbed in a feeling or idea. Those music videos can do that. Music, another powerful swayer of emotions. Love ya, Tonk