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Poet to poet we bleed our ink

So the drive to scrape the papertap the keyboardmake the mark Connecting with anotherin the lightor in the dark I know that senseI scream that screamI feel the system shift I know the way to pull the wordsto try to bridge the rift It seems a whima subtle pullor maybe just blind "choose" As target I am honouredAnd there is no thing to lose I know I gushSomehow I mustat times I need to touch I'm not ashamedto bless a nameor not to give so much I have my losses,you may knowit taught me to give more and I don't care to question now,these things I doand just what for. I hate the latest processthat blooms out of my penthe agitation, skinless shuddermarking where or when The awful full disclosurewell, too close for grace to flytorment that I try to dodgethat bleeds into my sky and so I write, and hate the stuffI cannot wait to ceasereactive, stretched and hauntedwhen all I want is peace I feel I owe apologiesfor these that I set downbut day by day it slides awayI hope so, for such bad renown Still I'm glad it has not put you offAnd whatever reason hereyou sent your late night pixelsand screen to screen we peer
— Cloudthings, Mar 04, 2009

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Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

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Geezer

Geezer

17 years 3 months ago

poet to poet

WOW! that blew me away! such raw emotion! you can be sure that the spotlight will be on this piece.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 3 months ago

"Brown paper packages tied up with string"

Ah, the spotlight is an odd beacon Geezer, I am not sure it has so much to do with the actual poetry than the politics here (though I am still relatively new & could be wrong, certainly some good poems have been posted, don't get me wrong... just I have seen some that are hugely deserving, go almost unnoticed), I am not sure I have the popularity it requires, & just as well I am resilliant & don't aspire to such heady status... I am more interested in the commentary from these genuine folk who can often help to hone my skills & point to elements I may have missed... I have come to really love this sight, AND it's myriad of personalities & styles, the varied motivations, baring our souls to some degree. I love the courage & the care that flourishes. I have spotlights in other places in my life, these other wonderful interactions are far more precious to me here. But thank you so much for the compliment. I really apreciate it. Have you posted again? I will go & look, & I hope so, it's a lovely thing wondering if your buddies have a new poem, like opening chrissy prezzies! Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
O

orgami

17 years 3 months ago

Its been said that others wish to "hear" poems read aloud

this is one I would sit silent and steady through I watch the ravens on the microwavetower do their pirouttes and tumbles from the railing their jumble of nest like a doodle on the formal lines of the screen they build this poem dances like they do on the aloof breezes they make it seem like a careless desire the flying they make all their learned freedom from gravity intuition practise care this poem makes me sigh I can feel the wind on my cheek soaring tilting as it does "torment that I try to dodge that bleeds into my sky.." like a line from a fighter pilot amazing And I am here gushing and in awe
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 3 months ago

I just meant to say THANK YOU

So the cycle shifts since I feel exactly the same of what you have written here. You see we have come (I think) to a similar space with our writing, it lands "home" in us... well your's does me. With our completely different ways of being in the world, lives that will never touch except through the ether, screen to screen I know that sigh it is a gift and I am greatly moved and greatly honoured these things that feel complete in me to be recognised so rare it is in this place so few could even bother to cast an eye I begin to have new insights (a sweet & delightful experience) I fell terribly in love once, with a budding poet I wonder now if this was why I had been so starved of sharing such of being known at my core the core of who I am as a writer so across all that distance you have liberated me with your easy swirls of verbage your delicate arabesque, poised line & space this gorgeous dance of letter passing synapse describing bird, wing, feather brilliance comes to hallo the sentiment of longing as it transforms to BElonging without need of another (it occurs to me to confirm, don't be concerned, I am not falling in love, actually I am being freed from longings that were perhaps misplaced the thing I miss the most was the poetic interaction, which was dissected, withdrawn, witheld & flaunted elsewhere... little snippets via text that kept me dangling whilst I witnessed this. It felt cruel but it was not (I hope) intentional perhaps) Such freedom in that knowledge .. without need of another I have always known that as a truth previously feeling it like the truth of a wound a precious glass broken, slicing clean & smooth into a blood welling palm the shock of this & disbelief shifting moments into cavernous resounding enormity drawing space into a microvision void of sense suddenly aware of how beautiful the flow of blood the sense of stillness the loss of life even (& I have known too often) how it pulls you into such a stark perception the relevence of breath the import of a heartbeat & the longing for another Ah, but I digress... again! Now, (with gratitude to you) it places me on ridges in the open vast array the view from eagle soaring the speed of rocket engine vessels in the sky (I always loved the Hercules, that lumber, cumbersome & squat or Tigermoths that stutter to a start. maybe silent glider riding is the way, hmmm, connect again, these cycles.) A solitary stance of power & release freedom does have wings, I feel them So thank you You give me space & inspiration to move to open pages spreading words in gorgeous patterns in my head, the underlined reflections the filligree of light & shadow sketched across my retina the sweet lead of your own exquisite lines that land like snow to outstretched hands the bleeding palm fresh blood warm snowflake mingled pleasure & the imagery shifts to warmer sentiments Miraculous, the healing of a brighter prospect a new delight & then ouch, that brings intrusion of another straying heart ah cycles these' they hurt, they heal, they soothe with mirth then harshly peel. Think I should stop... again it could be endless I am shocked by my own exposure! Candid expressions of my life I usually hold quite private (what's happening to me?) & yet ... nobody knows me here, so what does it matter I think. I've no idea today - what's wrong or right... knowing there is neiter except in our perceptions ultimately... Sigh! I just meant to say THANK YOU! ....& remind you that that poem was an instant response (do they call that word vomit? It felt far more gracefull than that) to the lovely rambling expression you sent to me of sleeping loved ones & typing by computer screen light, of perceptions of comments made & shared here on this site... Lovely when these cycles spread in ever widening circles of brilliant glistening inspiration... REALLY thank you! Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
O

orgami

17 years 3 months ago

and walk neath nights thin filiment in beaten jacket head tall

this this is what I miss what I remember long ago my female freinds immersed in mystery of mind they peered they swum around the corners where I failed where my mind didnt bend and so I admire this fluidness the mermaids sing the water world we start off in the oceans unknown yet as we master the skies with turbo prop and fast ram jets yours comments are gardens I'll never walk but feel on screens of ancient zeal the tether of the Spanish moss the brilliant cry of the honey grasss some creeping hunter Dazzle me and fear not I am safe my heart gathered at my Loris side like the ragged dog with the tattered hide but you I cant dismiss this pleasure like open skies for nights viewing treasures the whorl of galaxies and clusters You see yourself we reflect here its what Im taught to fight my fear and here alone when things are still I fly my game my aircraft thrill (YS-2000) 3 well I use a Microsoft Sidewinder Joystick graphics basic but cool Spit ME-190 B-29 Lancaster Zero P-51 basic passenger jets C130 Herc Fighter Jets Migs Starfighter some Helicopters Hawker Hurricane I love planes as much as I love Neopoet I am glad that my strange artist mind can allow you to write from you the above thats the most amazing comment ever must go now I feel like Im high your words your words my god
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 3 months ago

It just gets more & more lovely, all this wordy interaction

To follow this in common words that squirm to reach some hollow height I cannot try, I cannot dare this poetry that brings me sight as if no access here before & now I see... & so much more so lifted, such I never knew to interact like thus... with you & lovely Ann of Norway snow frollicsome through photgraph whose dancing lines lit lovely glow & left me laughing hours ago Between you & these others here but mostly this is what I crave I never new, but now it's clear I NEED THIS INTERACTIVE RAVE! HOW AMAZING HUH... What a joy to play words back & forth across the world like this ... sigh Oh & by the way, I want to acknowledge you (& a surprising number of other men on this sight, oddly enough), for having the gorgeous integrity regarding your partners... that you openly acknowledge them, that you proclaim your care & love for them & your loyalty... I was losing faith that that kind of integrity existed, it is such an important ingredient in keeping relationships alive & wonderful, & it is so heartening to know some men do have that kind of consideration & integrity... It also means that women here can feel secure to interact without fear of having interaction misconstrued or indeed being lead on. Makes me feel really proud of you (hope that doesn't sound trite)... such an admirable quality/action/choice that's all. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Oh dear Anni

how can anyone follow Orgami's first comment, and you did, and how again his comment and I feel all has been said and needs no more embroidering. Oh WOW! Your poem just sings its words in perfect harmony with your thoughts and is explained in such a manner that we are there too. I also loved the 'bleeding into my sky', and the light and dark that we find ourselves in alternately in the different hemispheres. Just refer back to orgami fo the rest, orgami you are a magic person i think. Excerpt from a letter to someone:- I will send them flying through the air with the electric signals that we now translate everything into- that's all it is, electric impulses: static and moving, bright and dull, like a pizzicato of sound patterns dashing through the clouds and across the seas; how do they not bump into one another? All very puzzling. To imagine seeing them is mind boggling isn't it? What chaos if a bird has the capacity to hear it, or what a mess if one has to fly through it all visibly, and all this excess that I send to you, takes part in this Jackson Pollock of an abstract sky, or universe-painting; in places a Fontana with great holes in the surfaces, in places a Turner-storm of colours, in places an intricate, complicated fugue, even more intertwined than Bach's music. Awesome Anni love from Ann
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 3 months ago

Darling Ann of Norway snow

Oh gorgeous Ann... how blessed we are huh... & you... lovely creature. Such familiar painters & musicians of course... mmmm between us we probably corner the market for hunger & lust for the best of the worlds creative pursuits & artists... Could never get enough of any of this... & that... could never get sick of the creations & whimsies between us... Perhaps I don't need to become a budhist nun & can give up my desire to be known (& know) so lovingly by ONE other... Perhaps I could be sated by this... these interactions... They are rich & will make me FAT. I bought some Lindt balls just for gifts! & hid them from myself A place up high & out of sight shoved back, in highest shelf Determined now, I will not touch temptation do your worst. Sensuous though they may seem lest my top button burst Your words though, ripe & round & sweet & melting in my mouth I lick my fingers covet crumbs that somehow missed, fast travel south. You spoil me & feed me cream & honey sweetly dripped ah feed me lines in bowls divine Until my mind has fully slipped & well you know Dear Ann of snow & Ann of image clear these feasts from you & Orgami bring me warm & near the dearest gift the highest honour the deepest sacred space you lean towards me many days & stroke with them... my face. Yes absolutely he is good isn't he.. as are you .. I am spoilt, & getting fat of heart from these lovely interactions, in case you didn't notice. Ah & it's time too, something I have craved a while. There are pieces of me missing still, but you bring me such blooms of happiness, both of you, THANK you xxx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

yes this was a fun little tumbling of lovely verbage

Hi DD (chuckle, who called you double D, was it Rett, made me chuckle!), please don't ever feel like you're intruding, you are most welcome. & yes this was a fun little tumbling of lovely verbage.... We are so lucky & so spoilt here don't you think. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."