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weighed an apple in the great magnificence of Independents store clean huge effecient expensive grand always remember the story from childhood Sunday School and colour pictures from our little white family bible always confused that if God made us and gave us choice why he would punish what he put into us mans side to tamper some say its our downfall that this new evidence of corruption filling the screens the news of great unrest to even develop yet is the result of the bite So forever afterwards I loved Apple trees tending our local ones weeding around them sawing off dead limbs taking down rival trees I miss my trees but I have my kisses and I love apples (Oh and this fine poem too!!!)

Many things are bittersweet in life, and addictive. I think I choose the bitter/s because of my addiction/s to the sweet/s. Funny, I too, have been thinking on Adam and Eve. The 'tree of knowledge'--curiosity?--the need to know? What's it all about Alphie? I enjoyed this and thinking about it. Yours, Deelilah

I said when I was 4 or 5 yrs old "I am so glad that Eve ate the fruit, or we wouldn't know ANYTHING:" Maybe I feel the same? For the poem, I would like the verses to be four lines long here as I feel it spoils the flow of thoughts. The language is fine and the idea of the bitter taste left in he mouth is super. C'est moi, Nina from Ann

So strange that that is what made the difference, now it is neat and whole. I am sure you were trying to get that effect in the first place, but, given the short lines and their meanings this is not a poem that can bear being stretched out like Longo's into a floating evanescence, it is a tangible story and has to follow on soon or we get fragmented in it. At least that's how I feel it now. Your friend Ann of Norway.

Um.....can I like, you know, have ANOTHER bite? Heehee five stars, sweet-inked Dragon Lady, I don't know how it read before Anne's usually deft suggestion caused an edit, but this poem is awesome. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Very Tasteful and Tempting!

the way it was said is nice. bitterness also is a taste helpful to seggregate the sweet. shan

This is a very amazing poem.

Interesting poem. In a different vein, the Gnostics viewed the serpent as the liberator who brought knowledge, or gnosis, to Adam and Eve which made them fully human, rather than viewing the serpent as the seducer who led Adam and Eve into their sinful nature. To them, the knowledge of their humanity was what freed them from subservience to divinity in paradise, and let them encounter the divinity within them...

Hey beautiful Nina... How I know temptations call, portrayed so well here in the mythical (sorry, in my perspective anyway) tale of Eve & that wicked snake... pushy little bugger eh? I really liked this, it has a hardy kind of solidity to it. You have so many modes Nina Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama