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The Road Home

frigid night
stained bright
by orange glare
of tall streetlight
I step into the parking lot
car already running
warming
black in blackness
barely seen against the asphalt
nothing moves
except steaming car exhaust
these small hours of the night
no evidence of life
or frenzied work
escapes from back within
the faceless walls
of warehouse left behind

empty road
curves through
concrete canyonlands
steam swirling over
lonely road
crisp with sparkling ice
headlights
pools of vision
for night-blind
travellers
the restless wanderers
of sleepless hours
road rising to oasis
of intersection
small world of light
and moving frieght
hung frozen everlasting
in the dark

smooth street
slick-iced with
the lonilness
of hours empty
curls downward
and around
through tunnels
of overhead highway
past jigsaw walls
of retaining stone
and concrete panels
blocking rush of traffic
from sleeping ears

desolate expressway
empty as a frozen
river surface
smooth as gleaming glass
center of a universe
of one
where I can think
and plan the day ahead
enjoying solitude
so precious
until the final lift
before the off-ramp comes
and there the city rises
bright and gleaming
tall lords of buildings
uncompromising
climbing purposeful into
the night-stained sky

They fall behind into
the sweeping curve of road
where thought becomes as smooth
as polished jet
and in machine-flow rush
of cars and trucks
all actions are instinctive
long learned by bone and flesh

Curve of roadway becomes
impediment now
long distance lying
between work and home
and so speed grows
as my foot begins to feel
the steps up to the door
until at last I turn
into the quiet of driveway
kill the lights with a touch
engine dying in darkness
and I walk up quickly
to the welcoming door
sighing with relief







— Race_9togo, Mar 01, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

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Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 3 months ago

I was a ghost in the passenger seat

This would be an unaccustomed journey for me & you paint it so well. I felt it moved more comfortably into the 2nd stanza (but that could be me) I really got the sense of the verbage & play then & enjoyed the process far more (that may be my aversion to city life, surrounded by forests on all sides, & not a single traffic light in my town)... In any case, you drew me perfectly into the sense of it, which is the idea I think. I think you love your home with its blue room! Cheers Anni I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 3 months ago

Anni

I like my room in blue, yes, but it's the people in it that I truly love. I am glad that you enjoyed this piece, I wasn't sure that it would work - but it obviously did! Yes, I like the 2nd stanza onwards too, but it was important to me to start the journey from work, and give it the sense of being isolated and inconsequential, forgotten til the next day I grew up in the highlands of Scotland. There I spent many months at a time wandering the Caledonian forest, the last remnant of the ancient woods that once stretched the length and breadth of Britain. I even helped restore a little bit of it in the 1970s! Still miss the isolation and loneliness of those places a great deal sometimes, although my family and I spend many good times in the woods and forests right here in Indiana, and I often take my sons on long trips to the Michigan or Wisconsin woods on the weekend while their mother is at work. Good times! Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 3 months ago

I love this

I can so relate to these images. I've experienced them all. I lived in Michigan on the Indiana border. When we finally got to go home with the truck after weeks out, this was my scene: drive through Chicago at night, sometimes iced, having left a warehouse somewhere, 'and in machine-flow rush of cars and trucks all actions are instinctive long learned by bone and flesh Curve of roadway becomes impediment now long distance lying between work and home and so speed grows as my foot begins to feel the steps up to the door' This one makes me homesick for those parts. Yours, Deelilah
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 3 months ago

Deelilah

Thanks so much. I forgot that you were/are a trucker. Yes, it's the expressway, North-bound I-55 past the Chicago Loop to the Dan Ryan Off-ramp and beyond to south and home. Good to know how much I got it right! Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 2 months ago

Yes, still a trucker

Though our address changed from MI to WA, we see that Chicago scene often. Personally, I'm ready for the midwest corn. Forget the iced streets. D.
R

R.M.Shanmugam

17 years 2 months ago

a long poem but not a

a long poem but not a lengthy one, showing your efforts in making such one. shan
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Wistful black cloak

I too can feel the longing for the wilds of the Caledonian forests here, when night partly hides the ugliness of badly designed buildings and ugly areas, the wistful black adds the loneliness of the hills to a town. I liked this poem very much, the only word that I found didn't fit was "darkling", that fits in the wilds but didn't seem to fit here for me. The "night-stained sky" I loved. An atmospheric poem this was Jim. Yours Ann of Norway.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Ann

I love making these pieces of description! I know what you mean about "darkling". I don't really like it either, but I've wracked my brains without coming up with a replacement, until I realized that hey, it's poetry, I don't have to stick with the original meaning! Hope the change is better Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Topping stuff Jim

Now I really like it very much, yes without that odd word that fits more in some blackbird romantic nature piece don't you think? I can't say more it great. I know the feel of what you see. Fourth line from last you write DIYING! Yours Ann of Norway