Flowers and Smiles

The concept of the flowers and smiles is a great theme and quite a good subject to write on, The way you have put it in rhyme and verse has been a little broken in its flow let me see what there is we can do to catch the attention of other poets, as we are of a different English base, the way the words come out are not the same so lets have a look at things. You see it is wonderful that you have come to a site like Neopoet to put work in, anyway here goes, just forgive my interference there is no offence meant, just another point of view:- Flowers,They are from His heaven to decorate this land of earth. Smiles,They are from a heart to fill in this life with mirth. (these four lines are ok and flow well) Thorns,They are from his hell to tear this life with greeds (Thorns are from his hell To tear our lives with greed) Tears They are from pains to swallow our days of life (Tears they are from the pain, That swallows our days of life) (Am not sure of these two lines) Smiles and Flowers have blessed to keep this earth with warm love (Smiles and flowers are blessed To keep this earth warm with love) Tears and Thorns have cursed to seperate Him forever from us (Tears and thorns are cursed To seperate him from our love) Select flowers to near him to reach and call Him to this land for others weeps and cries (Select the flowers to draw near him reaching out to call him to this our land To hold those that just weep and cry) Sakkthee, am not sure if the words I have used are giving the same message as the one you wish to say, but as you can see on each pair of lines there are little things that can be done to make the flow and also to bring a message to all that read. I do hope that I have been of help to you and if you need anything along these lines, I think a blog in the site will bring help even if you put your poem there first and then on to the main stream after, Yours, with great respect, Ian.T