Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

T

Lovers' Encounter by the Lake (No. 2 in a series)

Lovers' Encounter by the Lake

           written by Tink 2/26/09


Off the top of the Lake's water
In the dim moonlight
The mist rose into the night's air.
The Lovers perched on the moss-covered rocks
Watched in awe of nature's mystery.

As a moonbeam rippled across the Lake's center,
Water shot up towards the Heavens.
Her silhouette appeared.
She danced along with the twisting water
So graceful and elegant.
The mist twirled around her curves.

Together the water, mist and silhouette
Glided around the Lake.

The Lovers couldn't believe the scene before them.
The rumors they had heard where true.

Against the warning of friends,
The Lovers moved closer to get a better view.

The silhouette caught their scent
In an instant she stood still.
The water and the mist hung motionless in the air.
With red glowing eyes she focused in on the young pair.

The young girl gasped to catch her breath
Her fear froze her stiff.
The boy beside her
Poised himself to protect
his heart's only love.

The mist answered in turn,
To protect its master too.

The silhouette arched with amusement.

In a blink of an eye, across the water she glided
She stopped at the edge,
Hovering, she stayed.

Glaring fired-eyed at the lovers
She hissed, bearing her fangs.
Before they could blink,
She encircled her new prey.

A touch to the boy
Rendered him useless
Her hungered breath hot
about the girl's luscious neck.

Drunk on the fear
Emanating from their innocent souls
Her laughter filled the night.
The mist retreated with the shrill.

The lifeless bodies
Slumped against the rocks
That, seconds ago
Experienced their intimacy.

She seemed to grow in stature
Simultaneously with her angry power
The Ecstasy infused her.
The elated mist joined the celebration.

The Hunt was too easy
Not satisfying her at all
She needed so much more.

She snarled at the Lover's.
She hissed her own beloved mist.
She cursed the moonlight.
She vanished.

Back at the Lake's center, she returned
The still water cascaded down over her
As she stood in annoyance at the interruption.

Her decision took forever,
Only she, the mist and the water
Had the gift of life at that instant.

The Lover's souls pleaded for the same...

After a moment of forever, air returned
Burning the young Lover's lungs.
Their eyes focused
On the display before them on the Lake.

"Enjoy the gift, my treasures.  Until we meet again."
The silhouette faded
Along with the mist,
The water hadn't a ripple.
— Tink, Feb 26, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Pennsylvania, USA

More from this author

Critiques

Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 3 months ago

Another one about vampires I

Another one about vampires I see tink...love the whole mist and mysterious feel as the vampire emerges from the lake. I dig the title...it arouses curiousity as to what the lovers' encounter by the lake was without giving it away what the poem is about. Not as mystifying as Vampire In The Mist yet it is a voice standing on its own...ur an amazing poet tink, and for just starting to explore the whole vampire thing you have got a solid hold on the concept.
K

Kyarain

17 years 3 months ago

Another great job

Nothing negative to say... I'm not fond of the word "ripe", but I'm not going to let it ruin that line for me XD... One quick question... What was she standing in victory of? What did she win? The death of the powerless lovers? Is that a victory or a slaughter? Ok, well I loved it, but I think the first vampire one was bit more breath taking. Another job well done. Keep up the good work! Remember, own the words! So looking forward to your novel and other poetry~
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 3 months ago

Hey tink i agree this one is

Hey tink i agree this one is more captivating then the last, tells more of story. Has great imagery. In the second verse As a moonbeam rippled across the Lake’s center, Water shot up towards the Heavens. Her silhouette appeared. She danced along with the twisting water So graceful and elegant. The mist twirled around her curves. maybe it's just me, I kind of found that the last two stanzas don't seem cohesive...here's a suggestion if you will: She danced around, woven with the twisting water Gracefully of elegance With the mist captivating Her curving figure whole
ID

Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Dear Tink,

finally I get round to commenting on this piece! I love how you start with romantic imagery here and unfold the horror in the same voice. Your fascination with these blood-drinking creatures shines through in every word. Also, this poem kind of reminds me of my poem "Reflecting on Mermaids"...Maybe mermaids are vampires, too? Yours, ~Nina P.S. "Lover´s" (stanza 17, line 1)-> "Lovers´"?(Meaning one of them or both?)
ANC1996

ANC1996

17 years 2 months ago

:)

Just like the first i love this one too! :D i love how you make her say 'Until we meet again' if i was the boy and girl i would be terrified! Well anywhoo i loved it so much!Your writing is amazing! Peace; ANC!