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Interloper

Interloper

Icy drafts from crooked casementsLure me to peer from behind my lacy barsGrey and black and blue with ripples of silverShiver winters night beneath frozen stars I watch, barely breathing… The street below stretches;Like one long ribbon of anchored reality joiningSome point of redemption lost in frostyForest pine from the frenzied city My prison, my solace;The bitter cold flow of mirrored moonlit riverGuards, cradles.. protects the length of nightly ritualThat holds me spellbound and sets my mind free I listen, anticipation growing Soon I’ll hear the sound of his familiar feetSoft echoes sing back to my voyeur earsEach step planted in some far rememberedPlace of saving grace washed in fountainsOf despondent tears. A lonely figure, buffered against longProbing fingers of cold that constantly searchFor any crack in armor; he is unawareLost in fires past, sorting memories…If he would but look past his ghostHead down, he continues on I cry at his torment;Withdraw into the shadows   © Tonya2.25.09
— Tonya, Feb 25, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Tonya

A beautiful write that streatches the mind a little to things lost, not forever but in a glance at a cold world there outside, and an expected twist where he should really look outside of his ways and see the reality that you so much want him to see. I hope I got that right, Await your next pieses, Yours Ian.T
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

thank you thank you thank

thank you thank you thank you. I was wondering if maybe, perhaps, the picture i tried to paint to the story was too abstract. But, you interpreted what i saw well. ...the idea...watching from her window, the street stretching out below, bordered by a river. A lone figure makes his lonely trek from the city, walking into nature, quiet, where he reflects of things lost, sadly. :) Is hard for us to get over some losses, and i suppose, some are always going to be a part of us. Thank you for reading Ian. Always Sincere, Tonya
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Tonya...

I was reading over some of your pieces, this one has a haunting quality that I just had to comment on... So many times I've felt to be the "interloper", able to see the sadness inside of those we see often... those we don't know, but do... withdraw into the shadows... oooohhhhh what a haunting line to end with.... Richard
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

you have very good

perception Richard. Is easier to observe sometimes, than be able to do anything about it. There is a fascination with the person watching, for this lone figure that appears every day on their trek of reflection and brooding, their journey. lol, i had hoped that last line wouldn't be cheezy.. lol, it was what the mood called for while i was writing. helpless, wishing to stay unnoticed. Thanks so much, you have made my day. i appreciate you reading and your comments very much. Always, Tonya