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Imprisoned yoghurt top

  

I sit imprisoned in my cell

I do not think of coming hell

My yoghurt base is worn and old

It makes a moon so big and bold

There on the floor among the dust

My pleasures simple as they must

Be now, as here I wait the verdict

Of what the next steps will predict

Defining future pathways new
That stretch among the dust and dew

I didn't have to do it though its done

And being done the troubles have begun.

 

In this cruel life of mine

I find no soul divine

To lead me out, or up, or down

When I am here, all things confound
My eyes so sunken in my face

And where to look for solace

Is on the floor below the bed

Where cracks describe a griffins head

A strange grey bird of fantasy

In which my mind can fancy

Its somewhere else in fairyland

Where gnomes and witches stand

 

And cast their spells on all mankind

Leaving poor mortals quite behind

Among the dregs of concrete dreams

Where heavy blankets quaff our screams

Thank the good Lord for ruined walls

That poetise, the truth appals

And sinks the mind in travesty

For trying to see your majesty

Described anew in dust and grime

To save us from the madness, time.

Knock-Knock here comes the end resign.

 


— Nordic cloud, Feb 25, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

Ann, lol, i love your end

Ann, lol, i love your end comment after reading your poem. I suppose i feel pleased, if that is the correct word to describe. pleased that not all things we do in life are to be looked upon with regret but seen as what they are. Like..i did it, so be it, i will take what ever reprecussions come. There is a contentment i much admire, being expressed. a serinity in reincarnation?...to think, there is the next time around to change things still, if one might chose to do so. lol....was my gleaning of your well planted words. Tonya very much enjoyed your poem.
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 3 months ago

dear Ann of Norway,

this is one of your best poems yet, I feel. it was captivating right to the last line. rhyming suits you so very well... as does non-rhyming. I can't believe you have not been writing your whole life long, my dear and wonderful and talented Ann. would you send me the picture? please do consider adding two more lines to the piece, for the flow's sake :-) "Defining future pathways new" - needs a rhyming line, in my opinion, as does "And where to look for solace" your (delighted) Proprietress
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Such sweet words

from you my dear Proprietress, I have been writing all my life, but letters were my medium and poetry only when I was moved to do so. I have done as you suggested and hope I have managed the lines so that it is right now, you were of course right to point out the inconsistency that I didn't intentionally do, it was me who didn't study the poem afterwards for such discrepancies. Thank you for your appreciation, I am pleased to be able to take part in this place of creativity with such poets as yourself. Your Ann of Norway
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JWwildcat2012

17 years 3 months ago

I liked the depth of this one.

Its funny.I just replied to a comment that i recieved to a poem,and I was saying how the things that surrounded us has the ability and opportunity to become a poem.This write is proof positive.The descriptive flow in the lines was,and i will agree with propietress on this,captivating.The poem draws the reader to read,and i am sure you have that in your other writes,which i will read. Good job! Your friend,in peace, Scott.
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LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Love your work Ann

Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

What is a yogurt

Dear Dawning Daytripper (lovely three DDD's),You might well ask, I only put it in the title to catch the attention, it should have had a comma in between or not been there, can you suggest another title for me? "Across the giant pond", I like that and you are so right I, having had a father who was born in 1898 am a little tainted with the lacy dreams of past poets, my parents were steeped in it and found it difficult to climb out, in fact they didn't quite make it either, I used to think that what they liked was very romantic stuff and said so. But I am a product of the same roots of feeling and imagination and I dare say that puts me -almost- in the same category in today's world of literature. Tant pis! as the Frenchman says. Yours Ann of Norway ( Oh the pond was to me the Atlantic, but it may be the North Sea? No its the Atalantic I see)