The Perfect Crime

give us a clue "Who Did It" a very good write I liked it especially the Scrying bit, out of the blue you pick a word that will have people scrabbling not for their Boards either. Take care Ole wise one, Yours Ian.T

Though the last line seems to give a clue on the crime of 'neglect', it is not clear as both the victims and the villains are oblivious of their situation. The rhyme scheme, the use of capital letter at the beginning of the first word on the first line in each stanza and the use of oxymoron give this piece a unique quality. Well done. T.

Was wondering where/how you were. I like your new poem, and like the others, am waiting for expansion and more information. Good to see you back. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Three things that take forever to get here: birthday, Christmas, and the pizza delivery boy." - Garfield the Cat

there are so many things I like about this write, that I would end up writing down the whole poem if I tried to name my favourite lines. So I am going to post my only point of criticism here: In stanza three, please consider to move the questionmark to the last line. Yours, ~Nina

would indeed go undetected with any sufferers quieted from their own lack of seeing... that leaves me wondering... who or what... must think more about this one! Richard

...this read more like a, "What was done", than a, "who dunnit"! Correct me if I'm wrong, but you're speaking so eloquently, on the subject of a crime against humanity, that a lot of "sheeple" aren't.....(or cannot, or will not, see.) Right, or wrong.....it's a thought provoking piece and I thoroughly enjoyed this one. One last observation, though.....are you purposely trying to show myself, and others; the proper way to rhyme? I say this because you seem to get so irritated at my willingness to pace my poems with a ryhme scheme. Anyway.....Good write, ##{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.

This one flowed as I read it.Since being new to Neopoet,one of my goals is to look for poems that would give me a kind of blueprint to improving my writing skills.this one is a good example.The content intrigues you,while containing good rhyme scheme,and wording.I havent written poetry very long,because I have always wanted to be a novelist than a poet.But with poems such as this one that you have composed,i can at least improve my poetry to some degree.I want to thank you for reading what i have written,and i hope that you continue to. Your friend,in peace, Scott.

The perfect crime...no victims, no villians. Leaves us all to ponder? Sincerely~ Debbie

Henry Moore Yes I have touched this mans work Alien the ship of the stranded distress signal is like a Moore sculpture loved that movie its my favourite wow your poem is fantastic and great a snippet like a Ruperts Drop I want to cut the tail to find out how it ends but I dont want to destroy it Oh but I want to see it to feel it unravel in a thousand shards You have written a masterpeice my freind I love love love this poem of yours amazing But you have done it )a toast to you dear freind(

constructed this piece uncommonly carefully. The "carefully" shows/shines through. A pleasure for me to read. I happen also to like its universality. The sort of "you provide the crime" approach you're taken. And there're plenty of crimes that fit your content/-ext. Too many to mention/list. Thanx, Chuck

i really like this one. its a creative topic

Swindling the light from others, under pretense of prosperous investments. An open letter, presented in verse. In ink, Dabbler

i like poems that don't hand it to the reader on a platter a good example of the subjectiveness of poetry...interpretation is wide open i kept coming back to one word...'this' in the second line of the second stanza. i kept automatically reading 'an untold...' i think because this IS so open to interpretation, the ambiguity of 'an' fit better for me i particularly like the opening stanza. the way it's worded, and the shorter lines make it seem like an introduction to the verses that follow...yet it's not at all separate. 'scrying'...not a word that would strictly be used in context with garnering info from clues, but it really works well here. another thing i like...words that don't quite 'fit', fitting perfectly. i've read this about 6 times now, and like it just as much with each read. it's well written, it makes the reader think. the perfect crime...whatever the 'crime' may be, if the victim/s are unaware (how often through nothing more than ignorance?)...the villians, innocent, then who, or what is to blame? those 2 lines carries a lot of weight in this poem cheers p

use or lose any suggestion i may offer... i know you listen to, and care about feedback. i never offer thoughts with the expectation they will be used...and i am never offended it they're jettisoned. this is what a work-shop is about; the exchange of ideas i absolutley agree with your changing it to 'look' innocent such a small change of word makes a big difference cheers p

Am enjoying your take on things, P; however, since my interpretation of Jess's poem was about the reader being both the victim and the villain of the perfect crime... the villains *are* innocent worked. That's just me, of course, therefore subject to my interpretation. Besides in my *objective* world, society is both victim and criminal. ~A "If you think you're free, there's no escape possible." ~ Ram Dass

and yhet this bukowski bloke and then kerouac and sexton and the lot man those cats could write they could dig verse and ryhymne and crime most are blunt reaction so its easy to couple action back the old law Enter a room and leave something most days I myself bang away on the keys and Pleiades caught one and its fun but the "Henry Moore" peices are a hard construct because Free Verse is more organic in my thought then ryhymne but then nature has so many natural beats Listen to raindrops or tree branchs scratching in the breeze thunder advancing Opera and orchestra score make art on this but tis highbrow I came back and read this again and find it very interesting a build raw and freshly tilled Esker~