Currents And Circles

and what a heart it seems to be! Lovely imagery co-mingled with tender thoughts that flow in 'currents and circles'! But to no avail? There we must not go!

Great imagery here...my favorite lines; as the currents and like the circles I too will find my way. They give me courage. Sincerely~ Debbie

A good write,especially when one is done for a friend.I find that when a special poem is created,the creative images,words,and emotions within the poem are greatly amplified.In other words,the writer's spark for creating goes to a higher level than when they normally write.You remind me here that penning a poem for someone we know and like well makes for a fun write.Great work. However,i have one tiny question:I noticed the use of the word"sate"in your poem.Do you mean"Satiate"?It looked as if you were searching for a word that would be defined as"to fulfill,or satisfy". Nevertheless,the poem had a calm,relaxing effect when read.And relaxing the reader is the key,I think,in presenting good poetry. I have new poetry posted.Check it out when you can. Your friend,in peace, Scott.

...it was very mournfully haunting, to my heart. Powerful imagery, yet after reading it, I was all alone, yet at peace with that fact. It gave me, a chance to remember, mourn, and to hope...all at the same time. A nice feeling. Thanks, #{:>{)}@=== docmaverick.

I could see every word, every picture you painted, I especially liked the flow of your second line.

I loved this. It evoked some wonderful imagery and had my mind rippling like the concentric circles you describe. To top it off, unless I am sadly mistaken (which I am often) I would like to suggest a couple of changes as follows. To sates their hunger (sates should be sate in this context.) As the mind s sates the hunger ( not sure here, but I think it would be "As the mind sates the hunger) Great write my friend. 5/5 Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein

Which almost come across in this piece. Seems as if you're in some sort of tug-of-war. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"All day and night music, a quiet, bright reedsong. If it fades, we fade." - Rumi

Chrys, I am once again taken with your gift as a poet. Your imagery is well seen and felt. Your work has so much substance. Thank you for sharing it with me.

into this piece, just like the choppiness of water! This works really well, Chrys, the melancholy with which you've written it is spellbinding. On a minor, minor note, I wonder if you want the period between spiral and dive in line two, perhaps a comma instead? Mark W. "our hope is in the living God, who is the Savior of all people and particularly of all believers." 1 Timothy 4:10