The veiw of time

The view of time

How many of us will be left with the fight.
Just one more time to say I love you with all my might.
Time will not wait for you.
Time dosnt even have a veiw.
We make this choice of what we see
We make this choice to give love uncondisionly.
So what they all ways make you mad.
So what its hard to see what you had.
So what you always seem to give.
Is it so what about the time they have to live.
So how will this end
With the deaf of a farther , mother or friend
As you look back couldnt you find the courage just to be kind.
Couldnt you just see these words of love are free.
But will some of us ever see that time is short and that the key

Pressley Hambrick

— press, Feb 22, 2009

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Press

A piece that needs a little attention, and I think the odd space here and there to soften the flow a bit. The following three bits need a slight sort, other than that a good write, oh and the odd '' on words that have been joined like can't etc: love uncondisionly deaf of a farther short and that the key Will look at more of yours, Yours Ian.T

press

17 years 3 months ago

Press

I want to write with words that to you are smooth I need you to teach me with your wisdom as a tool I write with wings newly formed So many feelings in words every day are born I know I am good this is not enough for me I want my poems to be as smooth as can be I am called to this I do not know why I have to write to the pains or joys I see in life OK no more poetry I can write two or three poems a night So is this guy in pain NO dose this guy have things in his past or present that he needs to talk about NO I am pretty ok this is how I know I am called to do this

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Press

Now you are a part of Neopoets site all you need to do is write, but also read the poems there, and a lot of the comments that go with them. Check on the lonely poems and see if you can see why they are lonely, but it would be nice to comment on some of them to let the writer know how you feel about them. Most of my writing comes from elsewhere and not on the consious level as such and is there 24/7 if needed, some have to work hard at poetry. I write, I look, then think, then edit each line as required, enjoy your stay with us ,Yours Ian.T

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

The View of Time

A few changes if I may... How many of us will be left with the fight Just one more time to say I love you with all my might Time will not wait for you Time dosnt even have a view We make this choice of what we see We make this choice to love unconditionally So what they always make you mad So what its hard to see what you had So what you always seem to give Is it so what about the time they have to live So how will this end With the death of a father, mother or friend As you look back couldn't you find the courage just to be kind Couldn't you just see these words of love are free But will some of us ever see that time is short and that the key Great work my friend... Lissa I hold it true, whatever befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all.