Caster Of Stones

                                          Lend me your conceited ear
                                               as I bestow to you alone
                               universal truth that you are no more perfect
                                    than the stones you have cast
                                                      across the water.
                                       If in feigned arrogance
                                     you shake your selfish fist to the sky
                                          your gesture will go in vain,
                                   as even He knows the smallest stones
                                                  can retain their beauty
                                             long after your flawed hands
                                            have thrown them all away.
                                             So listen well, conceited ear
                                               for these words serve not
                                                 as a condemnation,
                                                but instead the reminder
                                    that you can become as unblemished
                                  as the stones you have cast without care.

— JWwildcat2012, Feb 21, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Brownsville,KY USA

Favorite Poets: D. H Lawrence and Robert Frost

Critiques

infinite_dwarf

17 years 3 months ago

James

I really like how you formatted this poem. It was easy on the eyes, and set up its own nice rhythm. Nice job. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"As you slide down the banister of life, may the splinters never point in the wrong direction!" -"God is good, but never dance in a small boat."

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Scott...

I liked your poem too...and everything flowed well for me except the first line... a stumbler for me and it could just be me but I was thinking if the "O" began the sentence it would help it to fall evenly even from my old country self... just a suggestion. I loved the theme and the title works as well. Richard

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Scott

As a telling off from the Universe this is a very good piece, writing of feelings, as this one is dictated by a futile expression of arrogance it is great, when talking of the softer feelings as some of my poems do, the words will come to you, so there is no worry of the way you write. I think that you must feel what you want to portray first, then search out the words:- than the stones you have cast across the water. Like:- A gentle kiss, as the ages of time skipped across the silvered surface, changing its form, with each touch. This is if writing about another feeling, hope this helps in you quest, Yours Ian.T

Robert Melliard

17 years 3 months ago

O?

I enjoyed this poem but I felt it could work better without the rather old-fashioned use of 'O'. Best wishes, Robert.

Janice Pearce

17 years 3 months ago

Caster Of Stones

James, I agree wth Robert here on the use of 'O' [but that could be just me] Absolutely loved the content, for it struck a nerve with me. ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Janice Pearce

17 years 3 months ago

Caster Of Stones

Ahhhh, flows much better~Love it! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Caster Of Stones

Let him who is without sin cast the first stone...

JWwildcat2012

17 years 3 months ago

Again i agree with your keen eye.

The reasons that i add certain punctuation in a poem sometimes is to invoke a pause,which i believe can add a kind of dramatic effect to the read.When some people read my work,I notice that they will treat every line as a run-on sentence,instead of letting the pauses take effect to better interpret and enjoy the write.Thank you for the comments,and i have adjusted this poem a little better for a re-read. Your friend,in peace, Scott.