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Old age Blues

 

 "Old Age Blues" Ann Harvey 2008.

 

 

What comfort in the mists of monday morning

Mundane and mellow in my mind's eye thinking

Softly on the thoughts of yesteryear when mists

Were cleared and as I feared not true, nor false

Not wise nor dumb, but only one small thought of love did come.

 

How love doth take our heart along a ride

So brightly, coloured rainbows moonbeams glide

Through mirrored passages of time that impress

And fill the void of life with all else but stress

Leaving a warm flow of blessed joy behind

 

Then all one's living has not been in vain

And memories come and go again, again

To hold our heads high, stop the sigh that comes

Of old age wrinkles, bumps and bruises numb

Aches and pains, to gives us joy's bright flame

 

To light the nights of greys and blues, the hues

That dull the spirit curb the brain, and you

Whose memory has ebbed away it cannot help

That you did love one day, its gone into oblivion

So now resign to calm and gentle nature's 'Endymion!'

 


— Nordic cloud, Feb 21, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Arrow

17 years 3 months ago

Soothed

by the gentle rhymes. Nice to see something besides end rhyme. "Whose memory has ebbed away it cannot help/That you did love one day, its gone into oblivion" - such melancholy. This whole poem is like drowsing in a lake of melancholy. My only complaint is the lack of punctuation which made me struggle for the ideas in some places. But about this I am still ambivalent b/c it's probably the lack of punctuation that gives it the drowsy quality.
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Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

My dear Ann,

like Arrow, I felt that the occasional comma would have been a good idea, but I liked the overall flow of your piece and -yes, Arrow is right- the quiet, dreamlike melancholy of it. I picture you standing at a window, watching the "mists of Monday morning" and contemplating your reflection amidst glimpses of the landscape in front of your window... Yours, ~Nina
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LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

5/5

Great work as always Ann Your friend Lissa
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 3 months ago

my Ann of Norway,

"Mostly what I have learned so far about aging, despite the creakiness of one's bones and the cragginess of one's once-silken skin, is this: do it. By all means, do it." - Maya Angelou your poem reminded me of this passage from the book Even the Starts Look Lonely which I can highly recommend to you, I think you would enjoy it, dear Ann. this poem is lovely as always. your Proprietress