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Proprietress of Crimson Hearts
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts
Feb 20, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hearing the Silkworms Scream


 

I simply immerse

pour me around only to drink me

toasting to ill health and humanity

in your sickest choreography

while hearing the silkworms scream
 

I simply reverse

sick of the sight of this shifted gear

so postured in fuchsia fear

I polonaise back to the rear

while hearing the silkworms scream

 

I simply get worse

devoid of restrictions or restraints

oblivious to all complaints

the protagonist just simply faints

while hearing the silkworms scream


— Proprietress of Crimson Hearts, Feb 20, 2009

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Crimson screams

Oh crimson silks and sickened screams I see you plight and sigh, oh why Did you so have to feel this pain While toasting humanity in your name I love the choreography, the reverse gear, posturing, the fuchsia fear, the polonaise, and of course the silkworms scream, like the scream of Edvard Munch (K) it has the feelings and drama of sickness, oh dear. But its good its good as a poem. Good cheer, you dear. Love from Ann of Norway
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

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17 years 3 months ago

thank you, my Snowqueen

I was a bit unsure about this one but decided to post it all the same. yes, a lovely picture... just imagine The Scream portraiting a silkworm instead of a man. I wish I could paint it but I can't even draw a straight line (I have driven several art professors crazy with my boundless talent). maybe Nina could paint it for me... ? oh, thank you so much for your lovely comment, dear Ann of Norway. it is always good to hear from you. your Proprietress
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Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

My dear Kata

I don´t have any points of criticism. I love this poem, and your effortless rhyme (especially if compared to my own feeble try at rhyming) leaves me in awe. Yours, ~Nina
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

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17 years 3 months ago

sweet Dragon,

I do not find your try feeble at all. ich würde es noch nicht mal als versuch bezeichnen, ist doch gut geworden! just needs some minor improvements, that's all. thank you for commenting, Nina! I wish you were here with me, we could write all day at the beach and blast all our money on cold coffee (crazy americans...). hm, I miss you and I'm really looking forward to sitting in your little kitchen of blue and orange in a few months! lots of love from here to there Kata
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17 years 3 months ago

Kelsey,

I see that not only has your poetry reached a higher level-of-wow but your comments have also matured. I am quite proud of my little Vampyre, I must say! I have only been here to read during the last weeks, just didn't have enough energy to comment. but I am here, as you see, and I will be re-reading your new pieces soon, whcih I'm really looking forward to. thank you ever so much for the read and the comment. I truely enjoy watching you grow, Kelsey. your Proprietress PS: I love the smell, look, taste and basically everything about coffee. but it is just so very american to practically make a religion out of coffee... oh the wonderful Church of Starbucks. just sucks your wallet dry...)
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Kata...

you have an abundance of talent in your pen, I want to borrow it... this is an excellent poem... the only thing I would add would be "" around "only to drink me" but the words are powerful by themselves and perhaps it would actually detract... just a thought! wowed me good with this one! Richard
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17 years 3 months ago

Mr Moonman,

thank you, thank you, thank you! I found that the poem had some bumpy parts, that's why I wasn't sure about posting it. I couldn't seem to work out what was wrong with it. your suggestion is perfect, I never would have come up with it, thank you again! as for that pen-borrowing... please, Richard, you are even more talented than I am... what would you need it for?! your Proprietress
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Stella

17 years 3 months ago

Sweet Kata, This is a

Sweet Kata, This is a gorgeous poem. How you play with words and so (seemingly) effortlessly rhyme those sentences... I'm in awe! (Kelsey, you made me laugh out loud with the 'awesome' vs 'awe-inspiring'. Hey, I think 'awesome' is a great word! ; ) I do feel this comes from a very dark or maybe angry place Kata or a day of despair? The screaming silkworms are genius though. I do hope you're well my dear Proprietress, I would love to be there on that beach. (Hot coffee, cold coffee - I don't care, I just LOVE coffee : ) love, ~Stella
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

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17 years 3 months ago

more coffee, Stella?

thank you for joining our little picnic. one fine day we will all sit together, the three of us, under a weeping willow, sharing thoughts and dreams, poetry and laughs. thank you for your comment, dear Stella. I hope all goes well this week!!! your Proprietress
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Ink Dragon

17 years 3 months ago

Spotlight!

Congrats, little muse! This piece deserves it! Love, ~Nina
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

Bravo!

The rhyme and meter are ingenious, and perfectly suited, somehow, to the bizarre world the poem creates. I think what I like so much is the contrast between the controlled form and the crazed content. Bravo!
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 3 months ago

Hearing The Silkworms Scream

Stunning imagery and word usage...delicate yet there is a harshness to it that balances the way it reads. The title just caught my attention and made me ethink it was something I just HAD to read...beautiful all around. It made me want to read more and wish it were a little longer...but good poems are like that. Keep it up.
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

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17 years 3 months ago

thank you, Katie,

for the read and your kind words. I hope I will get around to reading your pieces soon! I am looking forward to it. your Proprietress
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 3 months ago

Hearing the Silkworms Scream

Creative and very masterfull piece here~It's a gem! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
nokros

nokros

17 years ago

concluded

this to be one of your bigger pieces. yours nokros