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The Dream

The Dream

Zephyr and Morpheous came together;
Took me on a journey,
There I was free falling,
Through a swirling dark eternity.

All the things that I had saw,
In waking hours of day,
Formed vivid pictures inside my mind
And filled me with dismay.

There were the hateful thoughtless acts,
Exposed in evil guises,
Dreadful words that slipped unchecked
And downright sinful vices.

I tried to stop my headlong passage,
My hands, grasping at thin air,
The Gods of Wind and Sleep just laughed;
As if they didn't care.

Hot shame rolled down my pallid cheeks
At all the pain I saw,
For all the wicked deeds protrayed,
Every thoughtless thought recalled.

For a fraction of a second,
I felt a slowing pause,
In that breathless moment,
I found a righteous cause;

To eradicate all ugliness
Within my mortal  scope;
Fill the world with beauty,
Show others how to hope.

Put an end to selfishness,
The thoughts of single human beings,
Take more time to appreciate
The majestic mountains, skies and seas.

This nightmarish voyage, with passage paid,
Was a message in a way,
Took me places, I would choose to avoid,
As in my bed I lay.

But, I guess the Gods saw hope in me,
For they permitted me to wake;
From their gruesome visage,
They allowed for me to take,

A reawakening of heart,
Knowledge I could share,
The world can be a better place
When mankind, changes his maliciousness, to care.

2.20.09
(c) Tonya


— Tonya, Feb 20, 2009

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Sam Vargo

17 years 3 months ago

Nice imagery here -

I like it a lot. I wonder how it would look broken into three or four stanzas, though. It might be worth a try. Really nice imagery. Thanks!!!
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Sam, I am glad you

Thanks Sam, I am glad you liked it! I will play with the form and see how it flows. lol, Is odd.. i usually am a quatrain gal! lol Thanks for your input. Tonya
JJ

Jacqueline Johnson

17 years 3 months ago

Cool

I think its cool how its actually a dream, but with poems you can't really tell from the first line cause anything can happen. So I think its a really good poem.
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Jacqueline, i

Thanks Jacqueline, i appreciate your thoughts and am so very glad you liked it!
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Falling, falling in your dream

I am falling with you and enjoying the poem until I bumped into verse 6 where I wondered if you meant the word "minuet'? As I didn't understand it. The next thing I thought you could do, was to leave out the word "powers" keep just "scope". Then in the verse beginning "Put an end to selfishness...the rhythm seemed a little wobbly. Then "the reawakening of my heart" seemed a possible shortening for the rhythm again unless it changes your meaning too much? Oh dear and I enjoyed the poem too, but those were the only parts I felt needed a little fine tuning. Yours respectfully Ann of Norway
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 3 months ago

um… I really mispelled it!

um... I really mispelled it! lol. i was thinking minute pronounce (mi-noot) but... is not a common word and i think people would think minute ..(that fraction of a hour). So, i changed the line. i think it works.. and took out powers, which still leaves the meaning. I will have to think on the last suggestion. i like how it is, but, it is rather a mouthful. Thank you for your tips. I think is better for them :) very sincerely.. Tonya