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As the soldier marched on

                             Looking back,I remember still
                                        the grand parade.
                                  the bands,they dressed
                              in all the colors of the world
                        with dancers dancing to the sounds
                      of their triumphant tunes behind them.
                    I smiled,and clutched my baby doll tightly
                 thinking that the glitter of the decorative floats
                                        would never end.
                          Then,suddenly,the soldiers came.
                   The streets were forest green in seconds
                    and I stood earthly still in their presence
                even as my doll fell away from cradled arms.
                         I trembled slightly as they passed,
          even more so,when one of them broke stern march
                              and progressed towards me.
                        I closed my eyes in childish fright.......
                    ......I then opened to my dolls'embrace.....
                      looking up,as the soldier marched on.


— JWwildcat2012, Feb 19, 2009

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Region, Country: Brownsville,KY USA

Favorite Poets: D. H Lawrence and Robert Frost

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Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 3 months ago

A tribute ?

Although I enjoyed reading this poem, I think that if it included a clear tribute to the bravery of the men and women who defended our freedom in the Second World War, it would have a stronger message. Such a tribute is implicit in your note at the end of the poem, but not in the text of the poem itself. Best Wishes, Robert.
J

JWwildcat2012

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks

I can see how it would be a little difficult to make the connection in my poem,AS THE SOLDIER MARCHED ON.But I wanted the reader to see the compassion that the"soldier"showed within the last lines of the poem.I wanted the poem to capture the notion that our soldiers,while they are taught to fight agressively in any war,are also people who would want peace more than anyone.Thank you Robert,for reading.I would like you to be added to my friends list,so send a message sometime.
J

JWwildcat2012

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you Amartya

Your insight to my work has been very helpful.I am grateful for the fact that people will view my work and help me to improve it,as i want to become a great writer,not only of works of poetry,but to have success as a future novelist.I want to write a novel in the action/adventure genre,and i am sure it will be good for me to work on my writing skills on this site,as long as there are people such as yourself to offer such positive feedback.Thanks again.
L

LissaMine

17 years 3 months ago

Childhood Fears

Sometimes we shouldnt be afraid of what is real... The world will go on with all of our fears. I could almost hear the music as I read your words.