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THE MURDERESS TWINS!!

Slowly being pulled down into
a deep dark hole, trying hard
to shake the hold depression
has on me,

holding tightly by my finger tips
to the precipice of this  infinite
blackness.


then from deep inside this
surrounding darkness
I hear a cry for help,

for a moment I think the cry for
help came from me. But no, it
is Depression calling its twin
brother despair,

I look up and dirt is being thrown
down on me,

Despair smiles down at me, and
I begin to think that there is no
chance of survival,

suddenly a smooth soft voice says,
why bother, you know my brother's
are very strong, so just let go and it
will be all over.

Listen to our sister Suicide; she is
only trying to help you.

I begin to contemplate, how easy it
would be to let go, but in my mind
I hear,

Is it really easier to let go, or is it
better to live with hope?

Suicide screams at its cousin Sense,
why do you intervene, your sister Hope
has abandoned  him!!

My daughter never has abandon
anyone, you murderers have
hidden him in this deep dark hole.

Release him NOW!! Mother reason
exclaims.

I begin to feel hope pouring down on
me, soothing and calming me.

I feel myself being pulled up by powerful
arms, it is Life the brother of Death,
pulling me back into the light.

Death sneers at his children, you have
failed me again!!
— Eduardo Cruz, Feb 17, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 3 months ago

D.D.

this was way I asked you to read it, as your poem was touching and heart breaking. I did not feel hope in it for those left behind. If we can give one person "HOPE", we just might change their destructive course. I'm glad it helped, that was the intention of the poem to give hope to the down caste. To know that if we hang on things will change in the smallest measure to carry us through to the next chapter of our powerful "Life" I am so happy that you read this poem! thanks, Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track, Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!
AK

Adrienne k.

17 years 3 months ago

I love this peom… so glad

I love this peom... so glad I came across it!!! It brings me hope and I love the way you gave different feelings and entities family members' titles... Life is truly the best member of anyone's "family"!!!
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 3 months ago

A.K.

your perception is dead on the bulls eye. "HOPE" is what carries us through all our plights with life! Life is a powerful force that can consume us, but if we realize we can't do it alone, that help is necessary. That's where hope is born! I glad that you got from this poem, what I wanted to give all that read it! thanks for coming by to read! Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track, Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Eddie...

You do have an interesting mind my poetic friend... I have a couple of suggestions, I hope you don't mind... murderest... isn't even a word, and though we as poets have the right to change or even invent new words, you used it in the title and it made me not want to read it... but of course I did... the twins... in the title... well, there is much more going on in this write than the twins, depression,despair... which are very closely related. I would suggest another title... something along the lines of... the struggle within...the family within... just an idea. The deep dark hole is mentioned in the first three stanzas, there are other ways to describe this place... the infinite black... the surrounding dark... I don't know... just wanted to point it out... I thought you ended it quite nicely with the hope we all need to feel... Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 3 months ago

Professor,

You are correct, "Murderest" is not a word I will correct. As far as the twins, the jest of this Prose is about what "Despair & Depression does to us and the battle from within. I will do something with the dark per your suggestions. thank you, your help is always welcome!! thanks, Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track, Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Eddie...

Professor... lol, wait till I tell the wife that one.... thank you for entertaining my thoughts within your write, I do think it helped it... it was already good my friend... Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 3 months ago

Richard,

thanks again! I'm sure that your wife is like mine, and thinks "if they only new you like I do" then laughs! Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track, Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 3 months ago

Sweet Janice,

I am extremely happy to have open thought in you of the affect suicide would have on your Beautiful family. This poem is exactly about what you have seen, to love beyond our own needs, the hope of the future filled with something better for you and for me! Thanks for the vote and your true comment! Eddie Life is like a railroad track that leads to many junctures, if you stand on the track, Love comes speeding along and runs you over!! Splat!!!!