Periods

I know that stagnant feeling all too well, and must admit that I'm always shocked that not only can poetry come out of it, but well written, thoughtful poetry as well. This has a stunted feel to it, but a pause here: not the bad "you didn't write this well" stunted feel, but the jarring, wholly appropriate stunted feel that the mood of this poem possesses. Your lines actually feed really well off of each other. I was originally wondering if the final line of stanza one meant you were trying to be relevant too much, or if you were finished trying to be relevant. The last line of the next stanza cleared that up; fabulous of you to stick with your reader that way. Mark W. "An insult is just someone who hates you making a noise to indicate their hatred, a barking dog. Criticism is someone trying to help you, by telling you something about yourself that you were a little too comfortable not knowing. " ~ David Wong

I was picturing anyone in this write,being in the"padded room"that you penned down.The loneliness,and the doomed feeling of the character was well described.Dark humor at the end,was my favorite part.The character,as he breathes"Aaaahh,Fuck it",brought,believe it or not,a sad chuckle to me.Who says a short poem cant bring feeling? Good job. Your friend,in peace, Scott.

5/5, this one has it all: anger, frustration, insanity... good to see this side of you, I am delighted! your Proprietress