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‘tis daybreak at last, such an easy sun shines

on a land tormented by seasons of scar

those decades of rot, so vivid yet far, lay

prostrate and languish on the dusted altar

 

oh! weep no further you maiden of south

find solemn promise in shackleless bound

delight thy soul in culture and song

‘till thy spirit divineth in angelical sound

 

though the fields were pillaged - covered with waste

take heed, for the weary heart find salvage and joy,

in the minutes of mercy’s leftover chants

echo’d over plains with zest and buoy

 

from the bosom of this earth, abandoned

no more, virtue and faith like nectar shall flow

like virgin raindrops, unfamiliar, yet

defiant in the calm of the grim afternoon glow!


— nokros, Feb 12, 2009

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Region, Country: Northern Cape, South Africa

Favorite Poets: Phillis Wheatley

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nokros

nokros

17 years 3 months ago

style

type feels like classic - definitely not western classic - not a mike logan
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Conect11

17 years 3 months ago

Nokros,

I can say nothing that would make this poem any better. The hope you give to the blighted landscape (I'm assuming your country after years of aparteid and violence, but could be wrong) is simple and stunning, like seeing a single flower bloom out of the ash of a wildfire. Superbly constructed. Mark W. "An insult is just someone who hates you making a noise to indicate their hatred, a barking dog. Criticism is someone trying to help you, by telling you something about yourself that you were a little too comfortable not knowing. " ~ David Wong
nokros

nokros

17 years 3 months ago

conect11

you are so right about the apartheid theory. your description is spot on. thank you so much for your valued comment. regards nokros