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The Sword and the Rose (All three parts together)

The Sword and The Rose
Part I: The Sword of Fate

A warrior strong, hair worn long
Arms mighty as an oak
A fighting man, sword in hand
His prowess is oft spoke

With mighty sword, felled a horde
Many were those that died
'Neath flashing blade in quiet glade
Where winds of sorrow sighed

Sword bright, solidified light
Agleam in morning sun
With whistling sound, blood-soaked ground
Alive was left but one

With some wench in lusty clinch
His manly needs were great
Three or four and sometimes more
His baser needs he'd sate

One fateful day came his way
Heavy purse filled with gold
From noble born, tired and worn
Bod' shaking from the cold

A lady fair, flaming hair
With lips of ruby red
Must ride this day, hide away
Or else she will be dead

Forty coins gold would he hold
The price to save the maid
In all the land was no man
Could stand against his blade

With gold-filled purse, danger lurked
Death hid behind each stone
No safety found, road or town
They rode just two alone

Two homespun cloaks didst invoke
Visage of meager means
Beneath starlight late one night
Didst passion take to wing

A warrior strong, maiden's song
In each other were lost
Forbidden tryst, lives didst twist
And dear would be the cost

The Sword and The Rose
Part II: The Rose of Love

New fallen snow, two below
Huddled 'round sullen fire
Shaking with cold, neither old
They talked of matters dire

A lean-to tent, corners rent
'Twas all the shelter had
'Neath fur and hide, didst abide
The two in blizzard bad

Come breaking dawn didst move on
Down to the valley low
On they rode, where sweet streams flowed
And wind didst softly blow

Grass so sweet, beneath bare feet
Slowly they made their way
Flowers in bloom shed their gloom
They rested for the day

Flaming red hair, skin so fair
Lips burning ruby red
A laughing smile, woman's wiles
To danger both be led

Passions enflamed, wrapped in chains
Hearts longing to be free
Her luscious lips, laughter tipped
Yearned for what eyes did see

Her arms did ache, longed to take
And hold the warrior strong
Her face grew flushed, blood did lust
For what she knew was wrong

Restless hands reached, heart beseeched
And prayed he'd hold her close
The world didst turn, passions burned
And soon wouldst damn them both

The Sword and The Rose
Part III: The Thorns of Destiny

With flaming cheeks, knees gone weak
In fear her heart doth race
With torrid glance, takes the chance
They wrap in sweet embrace

Maid chaste and pure, quite the lure
Had never bedded man
With wondrous eyes, sweet her sighs
Her knees too weak to stand

A fighting man, massive hands
But gentle touch had he
With love filled heart, lips did part
His tender hands roamed free

With measured pace did he place
His manhood there and then
In passions throes, cries arose
And brought about their end

A hunting man, bow in hand
Didst hear yon maiden cry
A grave mistake, he did make
Two shafts did he let fly

One arrow flew, landed true
Warrior was laid to rest
One went astray, maid did slay
Shaft deep within her breast

Both buried there, fated pair
Beneath the forest floor
Where they are laid, warrior and maid
Grows a rose forever more

With sword-like thorn, to forewarn
Legend is brought to close
For to this day, thorns do stay
The warrior guards the rose

Originally posted in seperate parts , but somehow part three was lost. Instead of uploading them one at a time I decided to post all three parts together and see if that worked okay. As with all my poems I welcome constructive critique and always strive to improve.
— Rett, Feb 10, 2009

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Rett

Rett

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you Janice

I am actually surprised you even remember it. Very glad you did and that you took the time to read it and let me know. Thank you. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!
yenti

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Rett

This is an epic in all ways, I copied and pasted it with a larger font size, LOL, Your work was a task indeed, what can I say except it is great to read, and flows ok, the story is one of legend and reminds of the stories that describe things much loved to us. Well done young man, you see you will reach for my time of life one day, and have to assemble many, many words in their apointed order, to please those that need. You take good care of you, Yours Ian.T
Rett

Rett

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Ian

I appreciate it my friend. Glad you liked it. BTW, a tip if it helps. You don't have to copy and paste to get a larger size. holding down the ctrl key and pushing the + key will enlarge it and ctrl - will shrink it. Hope this helps my friend as I use it a lot. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 3 months ago

Rett

Wow, never got to read the parts, but glad I got to read like this. This is powerful and awesome. I like the olden day stuff. To bad he is gone..... wanted his email for a while. I really enjoyed this one thanks for sharing. Tree trunk arms, Patty drools. AWESOME.... Patty
Rett

Rett

17 years 3 months ago

Wiping up drool

Easy, down girl! *LOL* Thank you very much Patty. So glad you liked it. She liked it, she really liked it... *G* Much obliged my friend. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Oh what fun to gallop on

dear you, in the rhythm of this epic, knights and dames, fire and flames, you quite take us out into the dramatic, theatrical clashes of the past, we quake and dip to avoid the blows of fate and sword, and remember battles in times long past. I fenced for my county Leicestershire in the 50's/60's and know what its like to hold a sword. You caught the theme so well. I have but one criticism for myself, as I am blooming British and the lines of this poem are so short that the rhythm is also short cut, a trait of the American litterature sometimes, when we are used to long paragraphs, and that's what slightly disappoints me in this type of subject, and as you have captured it all so well...but that's just me being fussy. It great stuff quand même! Apologetically Ann of Norway
Rett

Rett

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Ann

Glad you liked it and I have to agree, we American do tend to cut things short. We tend to rush things instead of leisurely meandering on our way. This is one of the major things I like about this site is you get to see so many different views and get so much help on things. Never apologize to me for stating your views and outlook on something. There may be times our outlook is different, but I always appreciate another point of view. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Magnanimous of you

Rett, yes that is what, at first, I couldn't read Pirsig's "Zen and the art of motorcyle maintenance" for, its style was so choppy for me, but I persevered and then I read it three times absolutely loving "the smell of the pine needles in the early morning camp", the wonderful mental meanderings into the world of philosophy, the crits on instructions from firms, the third brick on the building that gave the subject to a student with writers block and the debate on modern philosophers which was just like listening to my husbands colleagues arguing about...nothing. And much else learning about America as he went on his travels. I just have to forget and see afresh, which is how we should see things. Always new always interesting. I want to add that I too liked you having all three parts together, I hadn't seen it otherwise, a great romp. Respectfully yours too Ann of Norway.
Rett

Rett

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks DD

Yeah, this one is a long read and that is why I originally posted it in 3 separate parts. Olde English is hard to do and I blew several spots, but on the whole it works. I tried to not get too deeply involved in the old terminology as it would be almost impossible for modern English readers to follow. Very glad you leaned something. The double rhyme lines are fun to read, but are a bear to write. Your new one, The Fog, didn't suck me dry but it was very emotionally intense leaving a person drained at the end. THAT is good. I liked it a lot. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!