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a perfect circle of naked ravens

1.

we always form a perfect circle
you and i,
i and you,

there are days when
i forget all about you
there are moments when
only the night weeps.

2.

we were naked ravens once
sleek ebon feathers
piercing
rainbows of indifference,
remember?
we listened to samurai swords
clashing and splitting
through the aphonic darkness,
gathering fin and wing
around us

we watch smoldering embers
slowly dying,
fall from the sky
silently drawn to the earth below.


3.

daylight skims the surface
the birdtribes are returning
light shimmers with radiance
and the light is all around
wrapped up in dark cloth
breaking through
the falling air
like beads of poetry
and cloudless sky
hushed,
for now.

4.

past the point of no return
the fatigue of living wears me out,
I have lived and died
an infinity of stars
flickering
with the brightest light,
we are moonchildren
and grandmother warriors
with grandfather dreams
of daylight,
we resemble
little earthquakes of joy
and mountains of sorrow
we wear the cloth of
self, draped over thin frames,
fraying
at the seams,
seemingly
we abandon ourselves.



— Kailashana, Feb 08, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years 4 months ago

Beautiful

this writing is. Thank you for sharing a few moment of heaven among the birds, stars and other things. It was restful to me to be able to enjoy a few words so simply but meaningfully put, Yours Ian.T
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks for stopping by my

Thanks for stopping by my oasis, Ian... Yours, Anna "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 4 months ago

Anna

As always, your words are strokes of color in time and space. Question: The last four lines of stanza 2 are a different tense than the rest of that stanza, but only the last two are separated from the others. It's the only place that distracted me. Possibly place those four in their own stanza, or change their tense? Just my thoughts, hm. love ~ Ronda
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Ronda, for both the

Thanks Ronda, for both the praise and the correction... now the poem flows better without that second *we*. I just didn't know how to fix it. Love, ~Anna "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
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Arrow

17 years 4 months ago

#4

Yes, I know that feeling. I had it just today. I guess the trick is to abandon one's self in the liberating sense, rather than the neglectful sense. Great lines: little earthquakes of joy/and mountains of sorrow
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

Arrow, do you notice how

Arrow, do you notice how sometimes many of the poems at Neopoet weave the same theme? Yeah, great trick if one is able to *liberate* oneself. I keep wondering from what. That changes hourly. ;-) ~A "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

It’s more than just

It's more than just *experiencing the human condition*, Arrow... it's the collective unconsciousness at work, eh? Smile. ~A "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
C

Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

The most beautiful piece

I've read by you yet. Fork tender, like a good roast :) (Although when you said "A perfect circle of naked raven's" I thought it was about the Baltimore football team playing nude...and that was so wrong... gotta take a shower now) Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

I worry when someone

I worry when someone mentions the word *roast*. ;-) And don't you be talking about no Baltimore Ravens here! Since Steinbrenner moved the Browns, I don't remember a good year, do you? (Hope somebody smacks you with a wet towel, Mr. Smart Arse.) lol. ~A "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
C

Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

lol!

Steinbrenner, huh? And no, the Brownies have truly been epically bad. Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
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Stella

17 years 4 months ago

*Beautiful* Anna You have

*Beautiful* Anna You have such an easy way with words.. they just flow... and fly in this case ; ) 1. and 2. simply amazing ('there are moments when only the night weeps' that's just perfect) Always a pleasure to read your work Anna! ~Stella
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 4 months ago

Now I have been a raven

It was lovely to be a raven and as somebody said here, helping us to fly and see, feel, hear the textures and sounds of the raven- of fabrics, feathers and swords. A sensuous feeling is transmitted, could it have something to do with an experience you had with the you, you I? if so it was a strongly sensed relationship. From Ann of Norway.