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Dawning

 Foam descends the pipe

porridge fried-fish and tea

the neighbour starts her 

chatter again

children scream

a shoe sole flips over in 

the morning breeze

dew drops from a 

 

pool into a rusty basin

the spider weaves a web

a beetle floats by his legs kicking

the kingfisher plunges

a skylark rises out of the mists 

and disappears into nowhere

four cracks in the window pane, 

how did they get there?

 

the sea paint’s mountain ranges 

in the sand

the cliffs scarlet, 

a no-colour sea

small stones on sand starred rises

untidy seaweed

a pale intense blue 

fills the world with day.


— Nordic cloud, Feb 08, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 4 months ago

Ann of Norway,

the freshness of a new day each day a new life which most take for granted living is seeing all and beyond and you do that so well, dear Ann. your Proprietress
K

karamat

17 years 3 months ago

Very good idea, and a very

Very good idea, and a very sensitive touch of usual things, keep it up.
Q

Quillsvein1

17 years 3 months ago

amazing imagery

ann. particularly the second stanza which creates a kind of dizzying effect: "pool into a rusty basin/the spider weaves a web/a beetle floats by his legs kicking.." i could feel those lines; excellent! GB
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Dawning

Thank you Quillsvein (are you really?) or GB. I like the everyday things becoming relevant in their own drama. Glad you enjoyed it. Yours Ann
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Ann...

loved the images of natures beauty delivered within your poem... that cracked window pane was great... yes, very good! Richard
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 4 months ago

Well I love your title on

Well I love your title on this one Ann. So sorry to have missed it the first time, I had to tell you. I love the coinsidence. Great write. Proof that its always great to go wandering to find past treasures. Great read. Your pupil, Julie D.D.