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Quivers Again

So I thought about what my friend said,And I asked you about the fellas,Oh I tried to ask you so coyly,And you struck me with your matter-of-factDelivery, that in fact you did, and who was I trying to kid,By keeping my hopes alive that little bit longer.This longing, the pining, replaced quite sharpishWith off-colour whining into my pillowcase, what a headcase,And the kiss I remembered so fondly has suddenly changed its flavour,In my mind, it’s gone from oh so sweet to bloody sour,You heard me right, oh that’s right,I forgot I don’t have the means to fight it,“That’s life, kid!”, as the uninspired might say,I think all I said to you on that day was “Oh right, well that’s nice…What’s his name, then?”She laughed, said “Well, what does that even matter?”“Aye ok then, I guess I’ll keep out the way.”Two months later, got an email from her,She had the gall to call me “bro”,Oh miss, I just don’t think you get it,‘Cause brothers and sisters don’t kiss,The way that you kissed me, and lots more.On that night, your skin felt so warm,But allegedly you’re cold at the core.I hope you have fun, with the stylings ofThis urban bohemia, You snatched from the movies,As a way to make churlish excuses,To the boys that you left at the proverbial altar,I’ll bet there were plenty before me,Aye, you heard me correctly,From now on I’ll stick to a more usual piety.
— fledermaus, Feb 06, 2009

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 4 months ago

oooh...

such anger on your pages... strong write! you took an over-written topic and made it new and alive for me. She had the gall to call me "bro"... loved that line and several others here... you do have the flavorful way of writing down... one thing stumbled me...third line... Oh I tried to ask so you coyly... did you mean... oh I tried to ask you so coyly. Richard
fledermaus

fledermaus

17 years 4 months ago

Ha

Why, uh, 'so you' of course! It's totally deliberate! *cough* Yeah, thanks for that Richard - it's a wee typo, I'll fix it now. And thanks again for the encouragement. I know this subject matter is done to death, but people are probably going to write about these kinds of problems 'til the end of days!
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 4 months ago

at the proverbial altar...

Mr. "Bat", Sir, this is one fine write! I am going to have to agree with Richard up there and say that I am looking forward to your next post! oh, and I love your name, by the way ;-) your Proprietress