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Nordic cloud
Nordic cloud
Feb 05, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Short poem

 

The snow falls

the hidden path reveals itself         

Tao                                              

 

 


— Nordic cloud, Feb 05, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

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yenti

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Ann

am not sure if this conforms to the Japanese way of writing I have stopped doing those as they seem to fiddly or even hard. The word use of Tao is in translation quite correct, but not as a concept, I think it is to do with a sort of life force or that direction. Feedback required on this one, LOL Take care, Yours Ian.T
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 3 months ago

Not 5/7/5 no

But the feeling of the Japanese style is what I aim for not hanging myself up in the laws! Tao = The Way however one wishes to interpret it otherwise. The snow falls freely on the path as it is free to the sky and then when other snow evaporates it lies just along the path, showing where it lies. Similarly, when there have been people walking on the snow of the path it gets hammered down and forms an ice path in a landscape without snow. All these allusions to The Path, or The Way made me feel that this could be used as an idea for this...? When you see or feel or experience The Tao it is non-existent yes! I must put in some more of these, my short thoughts. Do you have any? I shall not call them Haïku as that would be lacking in respect for their exactitude! LOL puzzles me, put it down to my age, I can't follow all the modern jargon? Yours Ann