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Think Like a Child (Sonnet Trilogy 2)

Put away those childish things, I was told;                    
now is the time to be responsible. 
The world is a big place and full of gold;
make your place and make it notable.
This is all you have to do: work hard, then  
work harder; goods will surely come to you.         
Don’t think about other folks; forget when
sleep mattered; drudgery alone will do.
I watched the clouds blow past the window—
quickly turned back to the grave work at hand,
still more deadlines to meet, reap what you sow,
you know.  How else will you take this rich land?
At end of day, gold lay far from my feet,
and ‘twas pink clouds I remembered so sweet.
— deelilah, Feb 04, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwest USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.E. Cummings, Robert W. Service, Emily Dickenson

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Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Deelilah, fabulous

Ah, the days when told to put away childish things and work. Always wondered why we couldn't do both. I had to put them away young as a lot have had to do, especially of my generation and I keep hoping for my second childhood so I can pick them up again. *G* The poem was pretty much flawless except for this line... still more deadlines to meet, reap what you sew, (sew=sow in this context unless it is needle and thread you are using. If that is the case it is a bit confusing) Otherwise, I can find no fault! Well done. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 4 months ago

Well, duh

How embarrassing, I know that. Thanks for pointing it out. I'll change it now. So you want a second childhood. Watch out, you might get what you ask for. Yours, Dee
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

*LOL*

My wife says I have a long way to go since I seem to still be in puberty! *LOL* Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!
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Arrow

17 years 4 months ago

I also liked this,

esp. this line with the double meaning of "grave" - quickly turned back to the grave work at hand. I'm having trouble with the last line b/c I think it ought to be "sweetly" - remembered sweetly. This topic is close to my heart. I'll have to check out the rest of this.
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 3 months ago

Hello Arrow

I see you're selling insurance today. By the way, Happy Valentine's Day. And thank you for the comment. Sorry it took me so long to get back. I'm glad you liked #2. They're all in now. I think I like #1 and #3 best. Let me know what you think. I do appreciate your comments. Yours, Dee