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The Holes in my Head

Clearly, through the holes in my head
that seem to pass for eyes,
I find myself in disrepair.

For, I've always met another's gaze
appreciating where it was that they stood, in their life;
giving me an answer to the volume of their eyes.

I've traded gazes with someone younger
and might've added years to my life,
breathing in their youth, to set me free;

then, however...I looked into another's eyes,
and she was old, yet priceless.
For she had turned her years to the twist of, ninety.

What I discovered in her, astounded me.
For, her seasoned knowledge of life overwhelmed me,
and how inadequate it seemed I was.

One's knowledge of life is only comparable to
the quality of one's existence,
and so, I digress,

because now, I realize that it is I...that is the one that is "old",
old enough that I should know better,
and old enough to see clearly the event horizon.

For, I greatly understand my existence, better;
and I shall never gaze into another's eyes with expectations
or I could be swallowed in a blink. 
— docmaverick, Feb 04, 2009

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About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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yenti

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

The Eyes Have It

Young man you have found it and seen it you should have shouted "UREAKA"!! or whatever word that man in the bath shouted, I think this was a great piece sorry that I hadn't been reading of late. Keep these great pieces coming others can learn a few things from these, Yours, Ian.T
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 3 months ago

Myfriend,Ian....

...howfortunate am I,that there's proof that SOMEONE finallycritiqued my poem! But,I was even MORE fortunate, that it was you! You've always seen past my rhetoric...and seemed to have almost always caught a glimpse, at least; of my near-sighted/far-sighted "vision"...and, I thank you. By the way, you're right.....I SHOULD'VE hollered something; but alas, I merely typed "it".(L.O.L.) Seriously though, I haven't had very many comments, of late...for whatever reasons...so, I'm grateful for you insightful feedback, once again. Thanks again, #{:>{)]@=====/ docmaverick.
yenti

yenti

17 years 3 months ago

Doc

Notto worry about the comment to much it is the same with meI think they threw their toys, out of the pram into the swamp, Not that those poems are anything but great, sometimes I cant seem to have enough time to reply or comment. I find myself drifting in the lonely poem page and knocking up some comments there, but last time I was there it was 4 pages of them so I shrank back a little. I think that each of us should start at the end of those pages, and answer at least three each, if the poems are bad then sugest a rewrite, or guide the poets, or even try to figure out why no one has commented on them, I may sugest that to the rest of Neopoets and see what happens, but you just keep on writing as your work is very good. Yours Ian.T