The Big Bang

I like this I thought it was good from beginning to end. a suggestion I think the ending feel short of a great finality when you ended with *we are joined, not holding, yes… we are here.* I think a ending with more impact would make it a five star. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Richard It seems the tide has turned and you again in harmony for a while. The place of dreams that become reality to share to experience the pleasures that we try to explain into words but just being just enjoying Mmmmmmmmmmm Happy for you my friend. Just beautiful. Electricblue

...I felt the "closeness" that you carry on about. I enjoyed reading your presentation. My ONLY criticism would be that you could've expounded on the subject, somewhat. You were clear and concise, however I thought you were a "tad bit" too, careful. Nes Pa ? #{:>{)}=/ later on, doc.

I think I rented a video once titled "the big bang," but I digress. I was expecting a scientific dissertation, and instead got something that made me smile like a secretive lunatic. (tm iknownobox 2007) Equal parts tender and naughty, I was caught up in this. Dangit! And I thought I was gonna get to use my clever saying that I stole from a poster... Oh well, gonna use it anyway. "Big bang: In the begining there was nothing... which exploded." Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible

Very relavent, such creative romance. In ink, Dabbler

Hi Richard, You, too careful? ; ) Thought it was quite racy as well, probably all the explosions and exploding... Lovely write Richard, am glad you're feeling all cozy at the mo' ~Stella

Richard, a really great read. The technical parts of poetry leave me cold(I know for others certainly the Japanese enthusiast this is not so)but the feeling and sense of a poem fire me. It is what a poem transmits to an individual that gives it vibrancy, how it connects you to the event or includes you personally or how it brings memories of ones own life or points to a future yet to come. I really enjoyed it. I personally do not believe it to be too careful, better to allude to or hint at with all things love else it becomes too graphic and a tad pornographic, too crystal clear. It is what it evokes and awakens that is important. Really good read mate. Andy

is that it begins to open up in your poem as metaphor for ecstatic or divine union. My only criticism is that I want to hear more about that moment of timeless bliss from you in your poem...how the microcosm of sex can open us up into the macrocosm of oneness, union, communion. I feel that happening in your poem but want more attention to it. I feel just a little let down at the end...but don't worry, I hear that happens to all men every onec ein awhile. (Sorry, couldn''t resist). Richard, I haven't been keeping up with commenting on your poems as much as I want to, but I keep coming back to this very Big-Hearted feeling in your poems, this sense of a great and vast YES that seems just a breath over the horizon...maybe like you're used to playing small or keeping yourself in check or not trusting yourself fully. I saw a storm coming once, rolling over the plains of some flat state I was dring through. I had to stop and watch. The storm never came, or I wasn't brave enough to wait...can't remember. But your poems are like that for me...big storms coming. I really enjoy reading them. They make me feel alive. -Michael

You sneaky little devil! So many little innuendos you stuffed in here, cautious, yes, but I think it's more tasteful - and leaves more to the imagination. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Three things that take forever to get here: birthday, Christmas, and the pizza delivery boy." - Garfield the Cat

It so rarely ocurs in one ness or together ness my life expireances have only reveal enough to be counted on my 21 digits I've and extra toe, Lol just kidding got off track there, Great write, lovely read, to short for me though kind of like the Big Bang all inspiring but, to short lived Donnie/Sinbad