DAYBREAK - A Villanelle

Very hard form, perfectly executed Very nice!! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Each weekday workday morning I growl awake to a frogpond alarm. Each weekend morning I struggle to stay asleep until as close to 10 AM as possible, my little ones play upstairs, which leaves me time to make breakfast for everyone and to watch George Stephanopolous and the Round Table. I like to get away in the woods, Michigan's Upper Peninsula, as I did when I was a boy. At those times, in the woods, I would wake up feeling peace and bliss, I mean, literally, peace and bliss, needing no alarm, each morning to watch the sunrise. Reading this poem --- I had no idea someone was watching the same sunrise. This is beautiful. Breathtaking and breathgiving. Peace and bliss. Wish there were such a things as "alarm poems." And I love the villanelle form...very fitting for these images. I'm wondering how you'd feel about the minor alterations below? You so beautifully perosnify the nature's unfolding element here that I wonder if some of the little words can be rmeoved to give more aliveness and personification. Just a wondering, though. Hard to improve this. A definite 5 of 5 for me. With those of the gentle dawn (With those of gentle dawn) As morning’s light begins to shine (As morning's light begins ashine) (x4) Fading from the horizon’s line (Fading from horizon's line) Shining stars fade and resign (Shining stars fade, resign) -Michael

I love the weaving of gods and goddesses lightly throughout, like gold threads in a tapestry. -Michael