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Craig Norris
Jan 30, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Lament 4 Jimmy...


Cars hiss by my window, wishin' Jimmy wasn't dead,
Trucks roll past their airbrakes, shatter stillness from my head.

Wakin' late this mornin', can't shake things that we said,
Waitin' for me out there is a life I've never led.

First step begins a journey, new signposts to be read,
Move forward take that footstep denyin' chances to be bled.

Signposts flash before you they are flashin' green and red,
Jimmy's down the drainpipe there was more he could have said.

Like a rabbit in the spotlight caught his own shot to the head.
Cars hiss by my window,  wishin' Jimmy wasn't dead.

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 3 months ago

Hi Craig...

Jimmy... it makes me want to know more about him... I liked it very much but I'm guessing this isn't so much a personal write for you... enjoyed the read! Richard
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Craig Norris

17 years 3 months ago

Hi Richard..

Glad you enjoyed it..not so deeply personal but personal enough. thanks for the comment. Craig.
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 3 months ago

Ahhh this is a story of one

Ahhh this is a story of one and two; the division bell. Thank you. Hugely enjoyed. ~Anna "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
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Arrow

17 years 3 months ago

Seems personal to me-

I like the way this is structured, with the primary thought then the thought that sneaks in on its tail. Also like how the poem comes back to the start. Life zips by and you're stuck. It's like that, for a while anyway. Sad but not hysterical. I enjoyed it.
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Craig Norris

17 years 3 months ago

thanks arrow..

yeah... like a question and the echo of its answer running together, circling back, were possibilities released or contained ? Enjoyed your comments. Craig.
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Nigdaw

16 years 12 months ago

A bit reminiscent of his

A bit reminiscent of his style, even without the borrowed line. A good tribute to a much misunderstood man, I really like this. Regards Nigel
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Craig Norris

16 years 12 months ago

thanks Nigel

I'm glad you enjoyed, I love that line, cars hiss by my window... feral prowling things. Craig