After dinosaurs... After us

Richard, technically a fine job. But let´s wait for the experts to chime in. As you may have noticed on the "learn"-forum, I seem to have missed some of the subtler points of Asian poetry until now. I like your write, ~Nina

As long as there is still some form of bacteria, or even a wee unicellular creature, the air will not be dead. Ever wonder if we'll turn into fossil fuels for another species to use?? ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Handle every situation like a dog: if you can't eat it, or screw it, piss on it and walk away!"

my friend on the moon, I do not know a thing about all that technical stuff, (except maybe that a japanese poem is mostly short) but I DO know that I love the title and the first line and the third line and the second line and the statement you make. dystopia... view into the future... simulatneous glance over the shoulder. delightful piece, good thing you found the courage to write in this style! your Proprietress

bleak dead lifeless yet containing a measure of hopefulness and probably true. A most excellent haiku. Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

I liked your Haiku. It's about nature, I am pretty sure you got the 5-7-5. Applause, I have not the wit to attempt one yet. someday. Great job, Patty

sort of like my back yard after weeding, lol. In all seriousness you did a great job not only in making the haiku, but in making the haiku spartan, which coincided with the subject and length of it. It was like just standing out in this area, and taking a quick look around. For that I didn't need a 10,000 word description, just this brief, simple, and appropriate piece. Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible

perfect Haiku something to think about as well Chrys

see the tractor in you in this work, apples don't fall from the tree...lol...

I think you did a good job on this haiku. Yes, the 5-7-5 is there. What does pencilman mean about the tractor? The more I read your work and the comments, the more curious I get about your real life. Deelilah

Tried my hand at a few of them and just not my thing, but I can appreciatte them, especially when done this well. Enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."