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a room full of blood

there's a room full of blood,
i keep trying to clean...
my dress a towel,
my saliva the only water to be seen,

somewhere, a soldier looks into the eyes
of his country's sworn enemy, lays down his weapon,
tired of bloodshed and the last thing he hears
is the click,
somewhere, a hunter sees a 10-point stag,
his elusive prize,
his eyes leave the scope,
follows the gaze into the wild,
somewhere, a hungry diner looks at his overflowing
plate
and thinks of all those who are hungry today,
bows his head in a prayer of thanks, and gives what he has
to the beggar outside,
somewhere, a logger stops with chainsaw in hands,
sees the majesty of the grand oak tree,
sheds a tear before walking away

this is my body....this is my blood.



— Kailashana, Jan 19, 2009

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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 4 months ago

Anna

a nice poem with with eloquently written unselfish jesters. your images are nicely portrayed. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

LOL Barbara, imo, it was

LOL Barbara, imo, it was anything but nice..it's more like a shot in the dark... or cymbals when you're trying to sleep..(or that's what I was trying to achieve) but I'll thankfully take your *nice*. ~A p.s. I love your picture, some of my nicest days were when I held my babies. "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Anna,

I love the way you give all of nature a voice of love, pain and long suffering inside a beautiful scene. For me this is a dance with death that we can all avoid. truly and honestly, down to the simple things in "Life" this truly moved me so I gave you a "5", it deserves more!! thanks, Eddie
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

Eddie…*a dance with death

Eddie...*a dance with death that we can avoid*... yes and now... it comes in a myriad of ways... and there is always *our time*. I am sick of blood that needed be shed, from tree sap on... ~A "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 4 months ago

Kailashana,

a beautifully disturbing image at the beginning leading to death and then to utopia ending with the essenec of life. we need more quietude in our souls... respectfully, Kata
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

The irony, Kata, is that the

The irony, Kata, is that the more quiet our soul is, the more we see the insanity. ~A "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

I write them, or more

I write them, or more accurately, a picture or thought forms, a sound, or feeling. Then a poem... It's the reader's when I'm finished... press submit. Sometimes, even I go back to an old poem, and laugh: "what the fuck was I thinking"? It's kinda like that. ~A "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~
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Lonnie

17 years 4 months ago

Awesome thoughts, Kailashana!

A forceful poem filled with images of life and death, and the struggle we all have with it on a daily basis! Bravo!
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Mum

This one pulled at me and thrashed my head around ... cant explain it ... but there is something in this one that speaks to me and your last lines are superb ... god woman you inspire me I was reading a few of your oldies I got bored and thought to go back in time love you Jayne x x