Whiphand

There are so many potentially dangerous and vulnerable aspects of ourselves and our relationships that we keep hidden just under the surface but emerging from time to time when something trips the safety valve. They often seem like opposites or contradictions of our accepted public self but they are still part of us and demand expression until the day the secret self is revealed for all to see. I enjoyed the poem and its progression and undercurrents and disturbing imagery. Just one word did not quite work for me and that was "attire"...perhaps because it was rather too old fashioned to be in keeping with the rest but perhaps also because it was not a strong enough image after the opening two lines of that particular verse (i was expecting something like "assail" or "invade" or "claw"). Just my opinion for what its worth. Keith

Dear Proprietress, Every time you post something new I am so in awe of your talent, the richness of your language.. I feel my words pale in comparison... There are so many great lines in this one. However, I am so tired this morning and want to read it again and again before I comment any further ; ) love, ~Stella

intelliegent than this humble mind could ever wrap around. I almost wonder if this poem is better read a little at a time. I love the rhyme scheme of the final stanza, what an awesome change of pace. You kept this fresh throughout. The imagery you use is *disturbing* and perhaps (hopefully) that was your goal. Moody, with a splash of gothic. Mark W. I like Cal and his dog Napalm I like Ike and his itty-bitty A-bomb everybody got one, I want mine you can order it up on Channel Nine. ~From "Doctor Jeep" by The Sisters of Mercy

I read this last night sometime and it was so deep I didn't want to comment yet... when I read it, it seemed like separate poems with ultimately the same sort of darker thoughts involved, and then I see your comment about it... I liked them all, you truly have a brilliance in your pen... Foetus Unborn... Fetus... this one was my favorite, a fantastic read! Richard

is among the very best poetry I've seen at this site. Or anywhere else, for that matter. And you prod this passionate ole man to say: "Awesome!" Thanx, Chuck

All the above and bushels more! Wow! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

I am sorry I missed this one, but relieved to see you have so many other astute and open-minded readers. What can I say about the poem? You know I love it! "Gothic"? "Disturbing"? "Rich in its imagery"? All the good comments are taken! So I´ll just give you a "meisterhaft". Yours, ~Nina

The soul of the poem is rich, its body richer and its clothes the richest. shan

You left me speechless!!~~ You way with words, your mind, fantastic~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________

Attire like a suit jacket worn a dress from the cleaner dried souls from distant expanses shrouded draped adorned weightless in dreams the sediment of dust layered

Proprietress, An outstanding poem I plan to read a few more times right away. It's like a rant, except with brilliant words. And the secrets, oh yes, the secrets.... wcw

Highly deserved in my humble opinion. Hugs, ~Nina

Same here Proprietress, congrats on your second Spotlight! Needless to say how talented you are my dear friend. Enjoy ~Stella

LOL as usual. What a powerful write this is. I cannot begin to describe the feelings it evokes in me. The language is beautiful, the flow of words is wonderful, and every time I read it something new hits me. 5 stars Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Kata The title of the poem drew me in - I struggled with this poem as it does ramble on but I had to read it over and over again. I have not been in this place myself but I know of others who have made this trip and see how the words would fall from their lips out of no where Proberly they may never even remember saying them in the cold light of day. This if found to be powerful. The almost sacred undertones and disturbing imagery a darkness unveiling secrets never really to been seen in the light of day. Past and present imagery. The connection between the stanza's seem to move on from one to another. This is amazing write my friend I do hope I have understood your thoughts here? Electric blue

i love you're work-definitely unique.