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REVENGE, Twice the lesson (continued)

Something cold and wet is
pressed against his forehead.
He can hear a voice calling to him
from far away. he slowly opens
his eyes, and everything is a
blur. He attempts to focus as his
name is still being called.
"Chicky can you hear me, Chicky
are you hurt?"
His vision clears, but not his
memory.
Suddenly gripped by fear he thinks,
"what am I doing on the floor, how
did I get here?"
He tries to sit up, but is held down
by a gentle hand.
"Don't move, just answer me, are
you alright, his mother asked in a
concerned sad gentle voice?"
She can't help, but blame herself.
"Ma, I'm ok, just let me sit up!"
He sits up, and like a flash of light
it all comes back to him.
This is the second time in his 11
years, that he has intervened in his
mothers beatings. Once when he
was 9 and today, and both times he
awoke looking at the sky from the
floor.
In his head he can hear the voice of
his friend REVENGE saying:
"You will not listen when I say, it's not
your time as yet, you must prepare.
Twice you have attempted and twice
you have failed. Listen to me and
VICTORY will be in your hands.
The secret of REVENGE is time, they
must forget what they have done.
When your time comes, you will enact
and overcome. There will be no open
door for their escape, only the pit that
leads to their very GRAVE!!!"
— Eduardo Cruz, Jan 17, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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prayersbyPatty

17 years 4 months ago

Eddie

Part two, spellbinding. I hope you are going to compile a book. Serious money can be made. I have heard of people who write books on life experience that did not have the experience. I was again riveted. Keep going Patty
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Sweet Patty pure bread,

How I do appreciate the encouragement, and yes I wrote a novel on this subject. I have not published because I'm working on book two. Been writing this for about twenty years. thank you so much my dear friend!! Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 4 months ago

Patty is right, the world is

Patty is right, the world is in desperate need of heeling on all levels, and it most always starts in our childhoods. Go for it! ~A "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Anna,

the healing didn't start for me until I was in my 30's, I'm 55 now and can see the damage that it had cause my life. I have walk to the edge and looked over it, but thank God I did not leap into the abyss. thank you for your comment and the love for those that need it the most, The Children. Eddie "If we hold to one way of thinking, we will only see shadows on a wall" By Plato and Sun Tzu
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 4 months ago

Ed

The secret of revenge...you definitely nailed that one my friend. I love the way you have contrasted a mother's love and concern with the voice of future vengeance. That's really amazing to me, and very well done. You get the kid's courage and the implied helplessness of being too young to really do anything about it yet as well. Another powerful piece. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Jim,

thank so much for the powerful, I'm taken aback by your comment. Yes, yes, yes, you have seen all the things I have tried to convey, and that alone is a great compliment to me, because it shows me that my attempt has reached the reader!! thank you so much Jim for reading, there's another coming. Eddie
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Janice,

you do not need to wish, your comments are helping me now!!! your understanding and love is plenty of help!! thank you my sweet Janice!! Eddie
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Janice,

self-esteem goes both ways, you also help raise mine. thanks, Eddie
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 4 months ago

Revenge

Ohhh Eddie, This gave me chills, and am anticipating the next write! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Janice,

I also appreciate your support!! Chills, that was more then I expected, thank you!! Eddie
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 4 months ago

Eddie...

I love your ear-rings... lol.. all right... the poem, Jim read it so well, said all I wanted to say and much better than I could... and now... this guy needs an ass-whooping you can't wash off...! I will be waiting with excitement for the next installment... powerful writing Eddie.... Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Hey Richard,

thank you so much!!! That's my Mom at 20yrs. I will be posting the next soon. thanks for your encouraging comment, Professor!! Eddie
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 4 months ago

Aaaaaaannnndddd....

BANG SPOTLIGHT!! well deserved my friend Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Jim,

I am moved by your encouragement and support!! thank you!! Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose De Diego
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 4 months ago

Revenge

Eddie, So well deserved!! Way to go~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
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IRENE

17 years 3 months ago

revenge

putting this into words is not all way easy ,you done this extremely well they say to do this is the first step to recovery ,in my case after the worst childhood a child could ever have ,writing my story down ended that part of my life for ever, Irene
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orgami

17 years 2 months ago

Just read tlhis today Ed Beautiful write

never myself got beaten but know only too well so many who were beaten mine was emotional so everything is eternalized writing is healing you have shared this well I am voting five stars this is a well deserving peice of work!!