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Blue_Halcyon
Blue_Halcyon
Jan 17, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Somnolent

SOMNOLENT White sheet, My precarious protection…..I draw you around me. I sit within your chalky white ringAs your numbness is my allowance For emotions that are thoroughly spent. My alleviation, from crushing thoughtsThat trouble me in this crumbling sleep. But you will be diminished and washed away With the tide of time And so, I watch for them….. They are waiting for that moment, Watching me with glassy black eyes.They have come for me,Now that I have no champion....... They have come,For the wounded animal That wandered off alone, And your thin white line
Cannot stop them.
— Blue_Halcyon, Jan 17, 2009

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About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, USA

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Rumi, Kahlil Gibran, Edgar Allen Poe, Lewis Carrol, Yeats, Bukowski, Langston Hughes, Johanne Wolfgang von Goethe, ect.

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yenti

yenti

17 years 4 months ago

To fear the dawn

I like it, but the fear of being awake seems so overwhelming. Not being nosey but wanted to really see those creatures with the blackened eyes that are there. Maybe if you told us, as a part two, they would lose their grip on your waking times. You have a great new day, Yours Ian.T
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 4 months ago

Blue Halcyon...

Welcome to the site... I took the liberty of reading your profile... I do hope you find your inspiration... this poem to me was very good... leaves just enough mystery to allow the reader to take it and make it personal for them... I loved the white sheet and the power you have given it... sleeping safely within its white rings... enjoyed the read and will be looking for more from you! Richard
Mark

Mark

17 years 4 months ago

Hi Blue, welcome to Neo !

Off the get go I had to look up the title which is neither good nor bad but a bit o a pain for me lol. hint - Somonex lol > crumble me in this troubling sleep? Seems to make more sense. Other than that this is a pissa poem. Reminds me of my experiences with the "eyes" I enjoyed this for the relative and thanks for somnolent :) See ya around ! If you read that I feel lucky. Mark
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 4 months ago

Somnolent

There are no suggestions I can offer to improve this piece. What I am able to tell you is that it is very rare for me to find a poet who makes me want to read more of their work. This piece makes me want to read more of yours. ~ Ronda