Night Cactus ~A Triolet~

I saw LOADS of these beautiful plants at my cousin's house in southern Arizona. What's a triolet? Haven't heard of this form yet, and am curious to learn. :~) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"And he talks to the river of lost love and dedication And silent replies that swirl invitation Flow dark and troubled to an oily sea A grim intimation of what is to be" - Pink Floyd

No technical problems here. Great theme. Loved the poem. Excellent job. I hope it was easier the second time around.

this one's GOOOOOD! Its amazing, how much meaning and imagery can be packed into so few lines. And you did so very well. I think I might try another one myself, after reading yours! Inspiration station from the Lady Pearce! Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

This is what I found. There was a picture of the white virgin flower, but It did not copy. You already know this, but I thought others might want to know like I did. I love this one. One of the strangest plants of the desert, the Night-bloomiing Cereus is a member of the Cactus Family that resembles nothing more than a dead bush most of the year. It is rarely seen in the wild because of its inconspicuousness. But for one midsummer's night each year, its exqusitely scented flower opens as night falls, then closes forever with the first rays of the morning sun.

Hi Janice, Yet again another master piece!!! This is absolutely (as my vote suggests)awsome. The last line ... well, I am speechless - I can almost see the that indescribable "desert night". Take care ... Leonard

I read John Stienbecks "travels with charley" and in this book he writes of the desert nights I loved Bedoiuns and read much on desert journeys and the arabs who named stars I remember sleeping on highway sixty nine on a rockcut moss bed the stars above alive and flaming brilliant and close enough to reach up and touch the Milky Way a gossamer garden delight this poem is a spiritual dreamers delight and I bask in its descriptions thank you '

Not only is it a beautiful poem, but extremely well executed. Well done! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

I wish I could write like you do, Janice! Sincerely yours, Wafi

J.P., A beautiful poem, in a difficult style. I took notes on the pattern, so I can try my mind out on it. Thanks...wcw

And what seems a complicated form. A very quiet poem but fitting :) I enjoyed this, Janice. If you read that I feel lucky. Mark

to see poets get more interested in form; codas and traditional forms, all that, because when we really want to freak out and write they are the engine. the last line is gorgeous: "Twas the beauty of Cereus flower/that showcased desert night." really solid, powerful writing! GB

Again, your talent is exemplary... And the theme is close to my heart since I've written poems about it. Friends of my parents had a Cereus they brought to Cleveland from out West; an occasion when it bloomed!. The Cereus is also called "Queen of the night" or Reina de la noche.. ~A p.s. disappeared (sp)? "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~

I love the way you used the Brazilian night bloomer to create a theatrical night scene. Your imagery is always exquisite and flamboyant! Congrats on the "Spotlight", it's always a pleasure to read your work!! thanks, Eddie

I can't believe I missed this little beauty... Eddie nailed it with "a theatrical nicht scene"! I'm looking forward to reading more of your posts soon. your Proprietress

J P I have just read WC poem called "Beauty Unknown" (A triolet) Which was written in responce to this poem. I had not heard of a Triolet before. I did notice the pattern in the lines. So I am intrigued to try this. You poem is beautiful, the way you weave the words. I am learning so much re writing styles on this site. It is exciting to see so many who will be up for the challenge. I will have to work on this a while. Thank you for enlightening me Electricblue

Having lived for a while in Arizona, I can relate to the beauty of desert flowers. Don't think I saw this one. Beautiful poem. The form is unique and a challenge to say so much in so few lines. Thanks. Dee

I like the unique way you described the cactus flower here.The work is short,and eloquent,and not often do poems contain the same two qualities.When i am reading some with just a few lines of content,I will sometimes go"What the.....!",because the content leaves me wanting to hear more.That was not the case here.The number of lines you chose worked very well.Thank you for reading the work i have done,and i hope you continue to do so. Your friend in peace, Scott.