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docmaverick
docmaverick
Jan 12, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Real-life Response

I try and be flexible
in my life, so to rearrange
my thinking and my actions
in preparation for sudden change,
that way life won't show me
as an individual "strange".

The 'morrow brings a plethora
of different things to see,
with hopefully, keen insights
so I'll stray not, from being me.
Plus rolling with the punches
I'll be happy, ultimately.

January is upon us
and with it the new year, too;
so how you dance with destiny
will help to make you.....you.
I can't control what's coming
but I can, with what I do.

The future is exciting,
I can't wait to see what's next.
The worse thing I could do to me
is not respond to life's text.
So I'll wait and see what the 'morrow brings
and see if I'll have any effects. 
— docmaverick, Jan 12, 2009

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About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Ink Dragon

17 years 4 months ago

Docmaverick

An ambitious piece with an ambitious theme. Trying to retain (or to regain) control over our lifes is a universal theme. I cannot believe nobody´s commented yet. There are a few rough patches, though: ll.9,10,16&22 would read even better without the commas. You could give l.14 one of the spare commas (in front of "with it"). "but I can, what all I do."(l.18) reads a little awkwardly. Do you mean to say: "but I can with all I do" or "but I will be able to" or maybe "but I can, what´s all I do"? I would love to read it once again when you have smoothed it a little more. Respectfully, Ink Dragon P.S.: l.21 worse->worst?
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 4 months ago

Oh...dragon of ink.

How very fortunate for me 'twas you who finally commented on this piece. I'm very flattered and honored, because of your eloquence in shaping your remark, and I thank you. I've sincerely tried to incorporate you ideas and suggestions; hopefully, to your satisfaction. Please, let me know. Truly humbled, #{:>{)+ docmaverick.