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Rett

Jan 11, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

mindspace

mindspace

through newborn eyes I look
into the wisdom of old age
across the galaxy I walk
while stars but light the stage

upon the withered wings of time
my soul sails on tears
to touch upon tomorrows
and caress the yesteryears

upon the winds of wishes
I surf the nova blasts
from the outer edge of never
to the core of what has passed

from the green hills of terra
to the rusty ruins of mars
I sail upon the dreams of man
and touch upon the stars...

— Rett, Jan 11, 2009

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Taurus1970

17 years 4 months ago

Rett, I love the

Rett, I love the imagery...the way this is written really paints a vivid picture in the mind's eye...I especially like the line 'I surf the nova blasts from the outer edge of never to the core of what has passed.' Gave me a little chill when I read it! "If I had a prayer, it would be this: God, spare me from the desire for love, approval, or appreciation..." - Byron Katie

17 years 4 months ago

Thank you Taurus

I truly appreciate it! Very glad you liked it. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Real good

Heinlein on your mind, I see from the last verse! Shades of Lazarus Long? Excellent write, once again Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

17 years 4 months ago

Holy Cow

Someone that has read Heinlein! Yay for you. You wouldn't happen to have a spare copy of "Time Enough For Love" laying around would you. Read mine so much it fell apart! Thank you Jim! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

RE: Time Enough For Love

LOL Ditto, I'm afraid, Rett...mine fell apart long ago too! Same with my copy of "The Moon Is a Harsh Mistress", one of my all-time favs. Reading "Friday" again right now though, had forgotten how much I enjoy it! with regard for a fellow Heinlein fan, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

17 years 4 months ago

Thank you so much Kelsey

I am very glad you enjoyed this. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Rett,

I love this site...everyone is so supportive. I enjoyed the imagery of space travel through the planets and stars. My favorite lines are the first two... "Through newborn eyes I look into the wisdom of old age" just beautiful! Sincerely~ Debbie

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Debbie

That is why I love this site! No matter how good you are you can learn something and you can make mistakes. Tap into the knowledge available here because nowhere else on the web is there a community like this one! I found my home after years of searching. I hope you have also. I am very happy you liked this one. As you have probably noticed by now, I write about dang near anything. *LOL* Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Ain't it the truth

Male, female, young and old, scholars and regular people all sharing their love of poetry and sharing their knowledge and outlook. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Dark

I second that opinion! Or should I say third or forth or fifth or... Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

I'm glad you found another Heinlein fan! Jon tried to get me to read 'Stranger in a Strange Land' and I just couldn't follow it... oh well ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "You can choose from phanthom fears, and kindness that can kill. I will choose a path that's clear; I will choose free will..." - Rush

17 years 4 months ago

Jess, Heinlein himself made fun of Stranger

Saying that a writer will do anything for money. *LOL* Stranger isn't the best to start with. I really liked a lot of his other stuff. The moon is a harsh mistress, the green hills of earth, and his whole series dealing with Lazarus Long aka Woodrow Wilson Smith. Start with Methuselah's Children, Time Enough for Love, The Cat Who Walked Through Walls, Number of the Beast and To Sail Beyond the Sunset. Heinlein had some great stuff and I have both versions of Stranger, The edited and the original uncut version. I Will Fear No Evil is another interesting one. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

LOL

He sure did. But I enjoyed "Stranger In A Strange Land" nonetheless! Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

17 years 4 months ago

Heinlein

Yeah Jess, my wife doesn't get Heinlein either. But then, I feel the same about Mary Higgins Clark, her favorite, so it all balances out! Regards, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

17 years 4 months ago

Jim

I don't like Mary Higgins Clark, Danielle Steel, or any of those type things. Iris Johanson (sp?), and the one who wrote 13th Tale (can't think of her name) came out with a couple good ones, and that's it. If it seems like it's going to be a soap-opera-ish type mystery book, I won't read it. I prefer my fiction to have a relevant basis - something very plausible, like Grisham. I guess that's why more often than not, I read non-fic! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "You can choose from phanthom fears, and kindness that can kill. I will choose a path that's clear; I will choose free will..." - Rush

17 years 4 months ago

Jess

If I may suggest, there is a book of Heinlein's that you might enjoy, at least partly, although Rett's list is in my opinion definitive. The book I have in mind is called "Expanded Universe", and it is a collection of some of his short stories, essays, speeches, political views, etc. His reminiscences of traveling in the old Soviet Union are particularly fascinating and funny. Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

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17 years 4 months ago

Rett, This is Awesome!

You have captured the essence of something that is beyond essence and yet a part of it! A trans-dimensional, Quasi-Godlike being that is Itself, a Poetic Spirit! My hat is off to you sir, and I am proud to be a Fan!

17 years 4 months ago

My most humble thanks my friend.

I appreciate it no end. I just, by chance, happen to be a fan of yours also. I am extremely grateful you liked this one. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

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poewriter58

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

I am awed and speechless . This has to be the best write yet absolutely astounding Chrys

17 years 4 months ago

Thank you very much Chrys

That little chat the other night seems to have recharged me. I appreciate the kudos from you my friend. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

All I can say is awesome write ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

17 years 4 months ago

((HUGS)) Thank you Barbara

I appreciate it very much! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

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Aroha

17 years 4 months ago

WOW

Krikeez Rett, you sure pulled the rabbit out of the hat (literally) That was god damn good,yup keep givin me suggestions so i can one day be able to write like you (hehehehe) yeah right,and pigs can fly... Damn YOUR GOOD!!! I especially love the 1st line,what an appropriate beginning..... Steph....

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Steph

Darn, look at that pig flying by! *L* Glad you liked it. Most people can pull a rabbit out of a hat, the real trick is to pull a hat out of a rabbit. Haven't managed that one yet.*ROFL* Seriously, you are going to be good. You have a great start and you are willing to learn and that is a big plus, especially here. Again, thank you. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

mindspace

Rett, This is absolutely one of my favorites from you.~Beautiful~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________

17 years 4 months ago

Janice, my humble thanks

I wasn't at all sure how this would go over. I thought it was good, but a person never knows what will happen. It seems I struck a note with many. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Kelsey

I do truly appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

i am so far

far from this place that im not sure my comments will come through clearly...it is so beautiful that i cant even truly meassure the words just yet but the feeling has sent my soul soaring...thank you...i needed this <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ 'My prayer is a rapture in blue' - The Ink Spots 'My Prayer' 1939

17 years 4 months ago

Oh my, if you could see it through my beard

you would find that I am blushing. Thank you very very much Emarie. You just warmed an old man's soul. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Janice

I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

J

Jinxed

17 years 4 months ago

that truly was a great poem!

that truly was a great poem! beautiful imagery and great flow that was enjoyable to read. my only query relates the rhyme. the rhyming pattern was clearly evident in this poem for every stanza except for the third where there was no rhyme, was this intentional? a great piece anyway though!

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Jinxed

Glad you enjoyed the imagery and flow. The third stanza is not an exact rhyme, it is more of a harmonic rhyme. When spoken they sound enough similar that it provides a near sounding match. Blast-passed ( passed sounds lake past) You will find this type of rhyme in some of the older poetry and a majority of songs. You're the only one that caught it. Kudos! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Now you "lit up the sky" as you said, Rett

Ere I be agin. Rett And its YOU who is walking on water, or walking on air out there and yet in here so all embracing, far away and close.

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Ann

I tried walking on water when I was young and knew everything. I nearly drowned. Now that I am old and realize how little I know, I understand why. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

Mindspace a special place where we create our own world aside from the ones we live. Nice write I like. Good as usual. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

17 years 4 months ago

Thank you Barbara

If you can get there no other way, the mind will take you there. *S* Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."