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Sketches of Ennui

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When you look into my eyes, I wonder –
If at times – you see the setting sun
Releasing the last spears of light as it
Drearily dips out of sight

II

Shoulders hunched
I sit crouched on a chair
In front of me, on a table
Is a crumpled sheet of paper
On which is scribbled
A few incoherent lines
Which beckons me into a world
Of inchoate form
And candle wax tears
Where hope lies encircled
In the shadowy wings,
The interstitial silences
Of doubt

III

Sprawling vacant spaces
Hollow gorges
Stubborn tufts of dry grass
Exposed by the razor edged sun
Kiss the horizon
Anaesthetised moments
Pregnant with nothingness
Wallow in gruesome grotesquery
Crawl around and knot each other
Like overfed worms



Posted on another site on Feb 2 2008

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easylife_2

17 years 4 months ago

This is good Leonard

I liked the progression of the poem,although I was a lil lost towards the end but I guess thats just poor me.Thank you for this one.
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W.C.Wampler

17 years 4 months ago

Sketches of (a roman poet Ennui Quintus, 200bc)

Daranjo, I'm not familiar with Quintus' work, but this does remind me of Cohen. It feels a bit drifty, but all in one place (space). I can feel this poet slunched at a candle lit table, glancing at a shred of a poem, stupified by the mere thought of writing in such a way as to be revered 2200 years hence. Love that last line with the worms.(and Cohen) wcw
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leonard daranjo

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks WCW

I really enjoy your comments. I like what you say: "can feel this poet slunched at a candle lit table, glancing at a shred of a poem, stupified by the mere thought of writing in such a way as to be revered 2200 years hence." I also happen to be a fan of Cohen: If I have been unkind I hope you can just let it go by If I have been untrue I hope you know, it was never to you Suzanne. Thanks again ... Leonard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

Leo,

Very very interesting that you would use ennui, being bored with your situation. The sun setting is usually a beautiful thing, but you put it here like you don't want to spend another evening in this predicament. It's what I got right from the opening stanza: "When you look into my eyes, I wonder – If at times – you see the setting sun Releasing the last spears of light as it Drearily dips out of sight" Drearily, Interesting that it not dreamily and spears of lights instead of shafts. Wow! Leonard but this is loath, for that person great imagery in this right!! a wonderful piece with a lot of force in it, as the will tries to hang on!!! thanks, Eddie
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leonard daranjo

17 years 3 months ago

I also love sunsets - my favourite part of day

Hi Eddie, Nice hearing from you. Yes, you are right.Sunsets are beautiful. I love them but there are times when you are down in the dumps and nothing has any appeal. What you have said could be another interpretation. That's poetry - open to interpretation. Thanks again ... Leonard
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 3 months ago

Sketches

Nice, Nice, Nice Leonard _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________