Karma’s marionette

Tossed about in stagnate winds

Twisted strings confuse direction

Like a fish without fins

Dreams exceed where reality cheapens

Clutch of an old demon deepens

— Frost Smith, Jan 08, 2009

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Jo Latimer

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Frost

I really like what you have written here. I think this is a theme many can warm to. The last 2 lines are without doubt my favourites. Beautiful. I am intimately acquainted with the old bastards, myself! Regards, Jo

Frost Smith

17 years 5 months ago

Jo Latimer...

it's more of a rant Thank you for commenting Frost

infinite_dwarf

17 years 4 months ago

Frost

Opening stanza is amazing, and does a good job of reeling you in. The lines about Cyrano de Bergerac (I assume that's who you were talking about) was a very interesting touch, and you paralleled the two (is that a word?) nicely. I would hope that you wouldn't marry your distant cousin, though.. :~) Nicely done. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"And he talks to the river of lost love and dedication And silent replies that swirl invitation Flow dark and troubled to an oily sea A grim intimation of what is to be" - Pink Floyd

Frost Smith

17 years 4 months ago

Infinite_Dwarf...

I utilized the cyrano analogy to reference pining for someone yet hiding behind a disguise...no I wouldn't marry a cousin; lol thanks Frost

orgami

17 years 4 months ago

"Like a fish without fins"

I like this line Frost and the whole poem for that matter its totally together the cohesive meaning the impact too great poem!

Frost Smith

17 years 4 months ago

orgami...

I cut two thirds of it; kept the begiing and end, going to try and build more here with the rest just going to another. Thank You, Frost