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We Surrendered All

Do you ever reminisce?

It was late October of 68.

An autumn chill was in the air.
 

Party plans made by little sis and I

A friend called and asked "can I bring this new guy"?

Doesn’t know anyone, being new in town.

Would you mind if I brought him around?
 

In my minds eye I still can see,

you looked like Elvis to a tee.

Mischievous eyes and that oh so distracting grin!

You snuffed out the dying embers of an old flame,

one look at you, and I’d forgotten his name.
 

And I, with strawberry red hair

framing my face.

Curious green eyes sought you out

from across a crowded room.

Blushing furiously at the sheer

brazenness of your gaze and

boldly, I met your stare.

When introduced by our friend

you asked me to dance.

Stepping into your embrace

I fell into your eyes, 

as the room quietly slipped away.
 

You had no car, we walked every where.

No matter the weather...rain, snow or sunshine

And as young lovers often do,

ran recklessly into the future.

We explored each other passionately

mind, body, heart and soul.

How curious to find ourselves

falling head o’er heels in love.

Never knowing so long ago

we surrendered all to love.

— Debra Bryant, Jan 05, 2009

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Kentucky, USA

Favorite Poets: A few of my favorites., Dylan Thomas, Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night, Robert Frost, The Road Not Taken, Maya Angelou, Phenomenal Woman, Emily Dickinson, There Is Another Sky , Elizabeth Barrett Browning, How Do I Love Thee? Let Me Count The Ways, Shel Silverstein, Where The Sidewalk Ends, Edgar Allen Poe, A Dream Within a Dream, Margaret Atwood, Night Poem

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poewriter58

17 years 5 months ago

Debra

reading this again I might suggest leaving out and everyone when you talk about the room slipping away , you already implied that all in the room was gone as well much better from what you started with Chrys
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Chrys,

Thanks for all of your help and suggestions for improvement. As always appreciative, Debbie
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Good one....

I do believe that I'd better like, you know, CHECK to see if poets I like :) have actually POSTED new material before I ask in a P.S. when I'm gonna see more from them! Sorry about that Debra! I like this a lot, except for... "I stepped into your embrace and looking into your eyes, felt myself falling, as everyone and the room quietly slipped away ." It seems a bit choppy to me. Perhaps... "...I stepped into your embrace and fell into your eyes as everyone and everything slipped quietly away..." ? Just a thought. Respectfully, Jim "Judge Not, Lest Ye Yeeselves Be Judged": God
Debra Bryant

Debra Bryant

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Jim,

Thanks for the comments and suggestions for improvement, which I made. Writing does not come to me as naturally and freely as some of the people I see here. So much talent here that it amazes me...and sometimes intimidates me. Thanks again! Sinserely~ Debbie