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Final Farewell!

How did you get in here,
do I know you?
Wait, I do know you.

Last time I saw you, what were
you seveteen?

My God you've changed, these
twenty years have been cruel.
Why does your face look like
nankeen?

Where the young man that was
full of life?

How's the family, your children
and your lovely wife?

They always spoke highly of you.
What do you mean, you don't see
them anymore?

I remember that their love for you
was like a spring downpour.

Why have you come here?
What do you mean your here for
me, say my goodbye's to whom?

There's no one left to say a "Final
Farewell" too. Why are your eyes
filled with rheum?

Just one last drink, and here's
looking at you!

I'm ready,
take me now Vishnu!!!
— Eduardo Cruz, Jan 04, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 5 months ago

Effective use of questions

I think the way you use questions in this poem is very effective, but I don't fully understand the last ten lines or so. Best wishes, Robert.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 5 months ago

Robert,

He's talking to himself, his younger self. He's come to the end of the road and the loss of all he cherished. Self abuse as caused this loneliness,and still at the end, he has to have one for the road. "SUICIDE" Hence the title "Final Farewell". Nankeen = a yellowish brown fabric. Rheum = water discharge from the eyes nose or mouth. Vishnu = the Hindu God of preservation. Thanks Robert, I hope this helps? thank you for stopping by to read and comment! Eddie
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Vishnu?

Interesting, as not many people would be praying to a Hindu god. The write itself seems a little jumpy in some spots, but the general theme is tied together well. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 5 months ago

Jess,

thanks for reading, but can you be more specific so I can try a rewrite! I appreciate your honesty, as always! thanks, Eddie HELP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 4 months ago

Eddie

This screams of lonely, and he man should be reflecting on the good times, sad poem. I enjoyed it though. I can relate to getting old. Patty
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 4 months ago

hey Patty

thanks for stopping by, I'm not getting old, I just don't remember things. Now what was it I was going to say.......... thanks, Eddie