infinite_dwarf

Jan 04, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Dreary Sunday

Flame flickers
dances
A little tendril of smoke rises
and bends
Apple cinnamon permeates
and calms

The cat awakes
stretches
With a yawn so big
her ears touch as she folds them back
and emits a purr-squeak-meow
looking for goodies
and lovies

The fiance awakes
stretches
With a yawn so big
the cat looks impressed
and he emits a groan-grunt-whine
looking for goodies
and lovies

It's time to tend to my family.....

— infinite_dwarf, Jan 04, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

Critiques

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 5 months ago

Jess,

what a sweet homely poem, right out of a Norman Rockwell painting! It's nice to see you back. Merry Christmas and a Happy 2009 to you and your family! Looking forward to no fiscal Woe's. thanks, Eddie

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Norman Rockwell!

Wow, that's a pretty huge compliment right there! I've been milling around, but my little pen needs a major kick-start. I don't feel that this write was it, though. Hopefully, there will be no fiscal woes for anybody. Thanks for stoppin' by! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

poewriter58

17 years 5 months ago

jess

I love the correlation between Jon and Jai I feel warmth coming from this write Nice work Mom

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

:~)

Trying to figure out who learned from who! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Kailashana

17 years 5 months ago

Hugely enjoyed, Jess. I

Hugely enjoyed, Jess. I just adore your takes on life. Norman Rockwell indeed! And...a lovely, Happy New Year. ~A "All in all, it's just another brick in the wall." Pink Floyd There are no walls except for the ones we build. ~me~

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Anna!

Every now and then something strikes me about a certain situation, and I feel it deserves a few words written about it. Thanks for peekin' in. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Barbara Writes

17 years 5 months ago

Real nice

I really like this one. this poem has that warm fuzzy feeling to it. Respectfully Yours, Barbara

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Barb

Thanks for the comments, it was kind of a warm fuzzy moment. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Janice Pearce

17 years 5 months ago

A Dreary Sunday

Jess, You always write with such warmth [unless of course it's one of your humorous ones] that I feel I'm right there with you. Thanks for sharing~ _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Janice

Yeah, my life is exhilerating all right.... staring at the candle! :~) Thanks for commmenting. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Robert Melliard

17 years 5 months ago

Nice family

It sounds as if you have a nice family there. Until quite recently I wished that my wife would give me a few more 'lovies' than she was then offering. Perhaps I should have tried doing some big yawns, like your fiancé and your cat, in order to get more attention. Best wishes, Robert. P.S. If you're curious about why I wasn't getting many 'lovies', please read my very short story called Thai Rack, and the comments which follow it... I'd be interested to hear your opinion...

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Robert

that's not the lovies I was talking about, really. Jai head butts you and does figure 8's around your ankles wanting scratchies behind her ears. Jon's lovies are cuddles. I'll give your short story a read - I remember the title, but not sure if I read it all the way through. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Robert Melliard

17 years 5 months ago

'lovies'

At that time I would have settled for cuddles - or even 'scratchies'... Best wishes, Robert. P.S. I forgot to say I liked this poem, especially the way your cat's ears touched behind its head when it yawned, and also the way it looked impressed by your fiancé's huge yawn... Such well-observed (or maybe well-imagined) details are so important in this kind of poem...

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

lol

the cat can make her ears touch behind her head when she yawns sometimes. I 'imagined' that she was impressed by Jon's yawn... maybe even envious? *laughs* ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "You can choose from phanthom fears, and kindness that can kill. I will choose a path that's clear; I will choose free will..." - Rush

Frost Smith

17 years 5 months ago

Infinite_Dwarf...

I adore the first stanza; builds and sets the atmosphere, really took me there. But with an opening that strong the next two are on the spot to finish and I couldn't find that same connection. Frost

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Frost

You've always given me valuable advice on works. I'd love to hear any suggestions on how you would reword the last two so that they become stronger stanzas. ps. really love that picture! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Proprietress o…

17 years 5 months ago

Jess,

I love this piece, I feel that it is one of your best (as far as I can tell)! you have found wonderful words to describe your morning(s). thank you for posting this, it brought a bit of warmth to our cold, snow-covered country. your Proprietress

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Proprietress

Quite cold and snow-covered here, too. I'm not sure why, but it seems my pen hasn't had the same vibrence as before - can't seem to get back into the knack of good writing. Maybe I'm just jinxing myself, though. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "If we always give what we have always given, we will always get what we have always got..." - Mike R.

Ink Dragon

17 years 5 months ago

Jess,

*yawns* no, I´m not bored, you described the yawn so well, it´s contagious. Those were my favourite lines: With a yawn so big the cat looks impressed I can see the yawn, and the look on the cat´s face! ~N

Quillsvein1

17 years 5 months ago

for

a dreary sunday you certainly created some appetizing sensations and flavors in this one. this is a long way away from the smiths'. this was heartwarming in a very casual way--when a poet can pull that off it is usually indicative of extreme talent. great job!

Race_9togo

17 years 5 months ago

Enjoyed this

I liked everything but the title, cuz in my house, such Sundays are never dreary! Cats and spouses trading yawns on a Sunday.....definitely my house! Good one Jess Respectfully, Jim

barbsdad2003

17 years 5 months ago

I think ...

this's one of your best. If not the. Thanx, Chuck

Jinxed

17 years 5 months ago

heart warming, homely and

heart warming, homely and cosy poem. nice work.

shazbat

17 years 5 months ago

All I can say is I wish my

All I can say is I wish my Sundays could be like this, loved this one Jess with its cosy feel John

infinite_dwarf

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks again, all!

A lot of my work has been getting the backspace key. I'm happy to see that the scribbles that have made it through are getting such a great reception - though I still feel there is something lacking to this write. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Handle every situation like a dog: if you can't eat it, or screw it, piss on it and walk away!"

JWwildcat2012

17 years 3 months ago

Another good one from you......

I noticed right away how the poem was composed,even before reading your footnote on it.You took life as you were viewing it right in front of you,and put it in writing.For all the ways we brainstorm for our material,whether it is true or not,we forget that the technique that you use here works.I will have to use that style myself more often. Your friend,in peace, Scott.