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leonard daranjo
Jan 07, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

time: a giftwrapped revelation

future flows intorevelatory presentdisplacing the past 




 

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Jo Latimer

17 years 4 months ago

good stuff

Hi Leonard - Really enjoyed this one. It's the kind of pithy minimalism I appreciate, and for so few words gets much across. Jo
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leonard daranjo

17 years 4 months ago

Hi Joe

Thank you. I am glad that you have enjoyed this piece. Cheers ... Leonard
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rosemary

17 years 4 months ago

Lovely haiku! I know the

Lovely haiku! I know the syllable count is always in dispute in the translation from Japanese haiku to English... but I enjoy a haiku that follows the 5/7/5 rule, for some reason, so much more. My only sticking point here is "relevatory." Coined word, which isn't a problem, but it distracts me. -Rosemary Quite contrary Now get out of my garden
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poewriter58

17 years 4 months ago

leonard

Excellent Haiku Chrys
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 4 months ago

time:

So spot-on Leonard! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________
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leonard daranjo

17 years 3 months ago

Thank you Janice

For not missing a singly poem of mine. I deeply appreciate your most generous praise. Cheers ... Leonard