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Nature Mithya
Dec 30, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Intelligence

How


— Nature Mithya, Dec 30, 2008

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Jonathan Moore

Jonathan Moore

17 years 5 months ago

I'm missing the point

I don't have any issues with the structure or flow or word choice, I am just not understanding the focus or message here. It could be, of course, entirely my issue and the point may be crystal clear to others but they've not commented so I am left reading and re-reading and saying: "Huh?" There is some good imagery in the piece but I find the lack of focus to be distracting to the point of classing it as avante guard for no good reason. Perhaps you might review the work and add to it to clarify your meaning or, least desirable, just tell me your purpose. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)
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Nature Mithya

17 years 5 months ago

Thank you for your comment and questions raised.

The poem was written on a prompt 'Are we alone in the universe' To hear and feel the living(Extra Terrestrial) in the universal wobble has not been possible. There must be a shelter hiding this DNA which I wish we could restructure to our wishes. Lol Intelligence in the mind and of the place is all we need. Hope you will accept the word 'Intelligence' as a good title. Thanks for your comments.