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Spirit Woman #6

Spirit Woman #6

She stands in the firelight,
One with nights shroud,
While the beat of the drums
Vibrate through the crowd.

She moves with the rhythm
Like a leaf in the wind,
As the plains' tall grasses
In the breeze as they bend.

No one seems to notice
That she's standing near,
And the chant she is speaking
No one seems to hear.

Glowing eyes in the shadows,
Dark shape seldom seen,
The fox watches closely,
His mind bright and keen.

Spirit Woman is dancing
About the main fire,
But no one can see her,
That's her desire.

Ghost Dancers rise afar
Adopted by the Lakota
The white ones are nervous
In the far hills of Dakota

The fox trots slowly
Off into the night,
The time is not yet,
But great is his fright.

— Rett, Dec 23, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 5 months ago

SW6

This lady sounds almost as sensual when she sings and dances in the firelight as when she bathes in a stream. Re- the idea of publishing your work (as some readers suggested in past comments) I have to say that my own experience in that field was not too wonderful. I have obtained more readers and feedback by posting my poems on a couple of blogs than by a publisher creating a traditional book form. But that's just my particular case. There may be more demand for books of poetry in the U.S. than in Britain, and your poems may well be more appealing than mine... Best Wishes, Robert.
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks Robert

Publishing is pretty much out of the question. I tried for 20 years to get published only to be told time and again my poetry wasn't suitable and then ended up reading pure junk they did think was suitable. I actually quit writing for over 3 years because of it. Then I found Neopoet accidentally and found acceptance I haven't had before. I love this site. There isn't much demand for poetry books here in the states either and mine are like poison ivy to publishers. It gives them a rash I think. Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Double D

I'm sure it is lovely up there, but I believe I will stay here. I hate snow and cold except in pictures. So sorry you are having such a hard time with the weather and power. Wish there was something I could do. See my reply to Robert above about being a writer. *LOL* Adoring fans huh? More likely they would like to show me where the Door is.. *chuckle* Merry Christmas my friend and Happy New Year also. I hope it gets better for you soon. Glad you like the series. There are a few more to come. Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)
yenti

yenti

17 years 5 months ago

once again

Well written and i am becoming aware that your way of putting the verses was great to start with, but are becoming better the more you write of Spirit Woman Lakota proverb "Omaúiyaúa úiñhañ anawaðopþañ kta ye. Maúiöazo úiñhañ owaúaüniðe kta ye. Aopemaúiye úiñhañ uñmasöe kta ye." You will all have to look for this one, LOL OK i give in the translation is under Lakota proverb “Tell me, and I will listen. Show me, and I will understand. Involve me, and I will learn.” Just to show that I can find things and read LOL, Have a nice day out there, Yours Ian.T
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks Ian

I am glad you are enjoying it. Love the proverb also. Got the pic and they are gorgeous. The necklace is devine. Absolutely wonderful. Thank you sir. I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)
MI

Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

17 years 5 months ago

Spirit Woman #6

Rett, This is an enchanting poem with beautiful imagery. It is always a pleasure to read your work. -Mohammad
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Mohammad

Thank you very much sir. I truly appreciate it. It is basically a historical tale told with an element of fantasy to bind them together. Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Glad you are enjoying it Janice

Thank you very much. Respectfully, Rett: "I didn't do it! I'm innocent! Uh, what was the question again mama?" Rett