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Happy Birthday, Dad....

Fifty-seven years of life have gone by
through changes, and stresses, and love gone dry.
Retired from the military
and now the Federal government
a part-time diesel mechanic
is now how your time is spent

Through foreign wars
and unknown waters
did twenty-two years fly.
I still remember the fear
from when you were put on standby.
For another foreign skirmish
with yet another country.
You were packed, and ready to go.
to wax a dangerous Iraqi.

We may not be as close as we once were
and I know that I'm often a brat
but know that you're still my dad
and in some ways, I'm still thankful for that.

Happy Birthday, Dad.
— infinite_dwarf, Dec 16, 2008

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Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.A. Poe, Lewis Carroll, Charles Bukowski, Michael McClure, Lawrence Ferlenghetti.

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zarul

17 years 5 months ago

jess

sEnd My HaPPy bIrThDay wish to your dad. he must be a great dad. dont heve much to comment exept this is an adorable piece. HUG ZARUL P/S : Where's ur mum?
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Zarul

I don't know about great, but he was ok I guess. I could have been stuck with much worse! Mother's on vacation, I think she's due back sometime tonight. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Does Rudolph fail the safety inspection if his nose is burnt out? And where does he go? I don't think he'd fit in the bay at the Jiffy Lube." Happy holidays, y'all!
Rett

Rett

17 years 5 months ago

Good one Jess

Sounds a bit bittersweet, but a lot of things are. Even I have one thing to thanks my dad for. He was my dad. Good poem with good thoughts Jess. Respectfully, Rett: "Each man is good in the sight of the Great Spirit.." (Sitting Bull)
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Rett

It was quite a mix, that's for sure. Like I said before, it could have been a whole lot worse. At least he stuck around, and tried to raise me right. My mother could have been a statistic.... ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Does Rudolph fail the safety inspection if his nose is burnt out? And where does he go? I don't think he'd fit in the bay at the Jiffy Lube." Happy holidays, y'all!
Robert Melliard

Robert Melliard

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Jess,

I like tributes to parents who are still alive because we don't usually appreciate them enough until they're dead. I'm not sure about the word 'wax' because it sounds too colloquial for the serious context. I suppose it means kill. That expression 'in some ways' in the last line opens up some questions in the reader's mind, but perhaps it makes the line a bit too long. Best wishes, Robert.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Robert

yeah, you know, that word doesn't sit too well as I re-read it. I'm open to suggestions - basically anything synonymous with killing without using the word killing. The 'in some ways' line is supposed to be interpreted exactly how it's written. Thanks for your input! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Does Rudolph fail the safety inspection if his nose is burnt out? And where does he go? I don't think he'd fit in the bay at the Jiffy Lube." Happy holidays, y'all!
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 5 months ago

honestly Jess, tributes seldom make good poetry

yet this was honest enough to make the mark. No-one is perfect. That is what I love aboiut your poetry, ingenuously honest. cheers, Jess "They that give up essential liberty to obtain a little temporary safety deserve neither liberty nor safety" Benjamin Franklin, wonder what he would think of the Patriot Act.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 5 months ago

Thanks, Jess!

Though it doesn't take much ingenuity to be honest, I appreciate your comments all the same. :~) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Does Rudolph fail the safety inspection if his nose is burnt out? And where does he go? I don't think he'd fit in the bay at the Jiffy Lube." Happy holidays, y'all!
JB

jean-louis bouzou

17 years 5 months ago

Nice tribute !

It's a nice poem/letter/tribute to your father with sincere words... Had also a military father... so I can clearly feel what You tell about, here... Not so easy for them to find a good balance duty/family... Have a nice day, Jess... jean-louis